讀后續(xù)寫-公園的意外波折：迷路少年的成長一課 講義 高三下學(xué)期四月模擬英語試卷

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Onesunnyafternoon,ayoungboynamedTimwasplayingintheparknearhishome.Hewaschasingacolorfulbutterfly,laughingandrunningaround.Ashewasfollowingthebutterfly,hedidn'tnoticethathewasgettingfartherandfartherawayfromthemainpathofthepark.Suddenly,thebutterflyflewaway,andTimrealizedhewaslost.Helookedaround,buteverythingseemedunfamiliar.Thereweretalltreesandthickbusheseverywhere.Hetriedtofindthewayback,buthejustgotmoreconfused.Timstartedtofeelscared.Hisheartwaspounding,andhishandswereshaking.Justthen,heheardasoftvoice."Hello,littleboy.What'swrong?"Timturnedaroundandsawanoldmansittingonabench.Theoldmanhadakindfacewithapairofwarmeyes.Timwalkeduptohimandsaid,"I'mlost.Idon'tknowhowtogetbackhome."Theoldmansmiledandsaid,"Don'tworry,myboy.Icanhelpyou.Butfirst,canyoutellmewhereyoulive?"Timtoldhimthenameofhisstreet,buttheoldmanshookhishead,sayingthathewasn'tfamiliarwiththatplace.However,theoldmansaidheknewapolicestationnearby.HeofferedtotakeTimtheresothatthepolicecouldhelphimfindhiswayhome.Timwasabithesitantatfirst,butseeingthekind-lookingoldman,hedecidedtotrusthim.Theystartedwalkingthroughtheparktogether.Astheywerewalking,theoldmantoldTimsomeinterestingstoriesaboutthepark.Hepointedoutdifferentkindsofplantsandbirds,tryingtomakeTimfeellessscared.Timgraduallycalmeddownandbegantolistenattentivelytotheoldman'sstories.Butafterwalkingforawhile,Timnoticedthattheyseemedtobewalkingdeeperintotheparkinsteadofgettingclosertothepolicestation.AsenseofuneasinesscreptbackintoTim'sheart.Helookedattheoldmanandasked,"Arewegoingintherightdirection?Idon'tseethepolicestation."Theoldmanjustsmiledandsaid,"It'snotfarnow.Don'tworry."續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。Timstartedtofeelmoreandmoreworried.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thejoggersimmediatelyrealizedsomethingwaswrong.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________續(xù)寫中需要回答的問題?WhatdidTimdowhenhesawthejoggers??Answer:Timquicklyrantowardsthejoggers,shoutingforhelp.?Howdidthejoggersreact??Answer:Thejoggerslookedattheoldmansuspiciously,listenedtoTim'sstory,andonecalledthepolicewhiletheotherstayedwithTim.?Whatdidthepolicefindout??Answer:Thepolicefoundoutthattheoldmanhadnoillintentionsbutwasjustconfusedaboutthewaytothepolicestation.?HowdidTim'sparentsfeelwhentheysawhim??Answer:Tim'sparentswereoverjoyedtoseehim.?WhatlessondidTimlearn??Answer:Timlearnedtobecautiousandthatmostpeoplearekind-hearted.?故事主旨?Thestoryshowsthatinunexpectedandpotentiallydangeroussituations,oneshouldstayalertandseekhelpwhenindoubt.Italsoemphasizesthatalthoughcautionisimportant,therearestillmanykind-heartedpeopleintheworld.?故事山?Beginning:Timgetslostintheparkwhilechasingabutterfly.?RisingAction:AnoldmanofferstotakeTimtothepolicestation,butastheywalk,Timbecomesuneasyastheyseemtobegoingdeeperintothepark.?Climax:Timseesjoggersandrunstothemforhelp.?FallingAction:Thejoggerscallthepolice,andthepolicequestiontheoldman.?Ending:Timisdrivenhomebythepolice,andhelearnsavaluablelesson.?故事發(fā)展線索?Tim'sinitialjoyofchasingabutterflyturnsintofearwhenhegetslost.Theoldman'soffertohelpseemspromisingatfirstbutthencausesmoreworry.Theappearanceofthejoggersprovidesaturningpoint,leadingtotheinvolvementofthepoliceandTim'ssafereturnhome.?情感線索?Timstartswithexcitement,thenfearwhenlost,abitofreliefwhentheoldmanoffershelp,andincreasingworryasthejourneyprogresses.Finally,hefeelsreliefandlearnsalesson.?續(xù)寫布局與框架?ThefirstparagraphfocusesonTim'sgrowingworryandhisactionofseekinghelpfromthejoggers.Thesecondparagraphdetailsthejoggers'response,thearrivalofthepolice,andtheresolutionofthesituation,alongwithTim'slessonlearned.?續(xù)寫注意事項(xiàng)?承接原文:KeepTim'scharacterconsistentinhisfeelingsoffearandworry.Theoldman'sactionsandwordsshouldalsofollowthepatternsetintheoriginaltext.?整體設(shè)計(jì):EnsureasmoothflowfromTim'sdoubttothejoggers'appearanceandthesubsequentevents.Theresolutionshouldbelogical.?巧妙設(shè)計(jì):UsedetailslikeTim'sphysicalreactionstoshowhisworryandthejoggers'immediateconcerntomakethestorymoreengaging.?高分語句?呼應(yīng)原文:“Hishandsclenchedintofists,andhiseyesdartedaround,searchingforanysignsofthepolicestation.”ThisechoesTim'searlierstateofworrywhenherealizedsomethingwaswrong.?高級句型:“Thejoggersimmediatelyrealizedsomethingwaswrong.”(usingtheimmediatelyadverbtoshowquickreaction)?主題表達(dá)&意義延伸?直接引語點(diǎn)明主旨:“Timlearnedavaluablelessonaboutbeingcautious,yetalsothatmostpeoplearekind-hearted.”ThisdirectlystatesthelessonTimlearned.?促成轉(zhuǎn)變，引發(fā)感悟:Tim'sinitialtrustintheoldmanandhissubsequentdoubtcanmakereadersthinkabouthowtobalancetrustandcautioninreal-lifesituations.?借象征物點(diǎn)明主旨:Theparkcanbeseenasasymboloftheunknownandpotentiallydangerousworld.Tim'sjourneythroughitrepresentsthechallengesonemayfaceandhowtoovercomethem.?學(xué)生寫作示范?Timstartedtofeelmoreandmoreworried.Hisbreathinggrewrapid,andhisstepssloweddown.Theoldman'scontinuousclaimsthatthepolicestationwasnearsoundedlessandlessbelievable.Suddenly,hespottedagroupofpeoplewalkingtowardsthem.Withouthesitation,Timbrokefreefromtheoldman'ssideandrushedtowardsthegroup,yelling,“Help!I'mlost,andIdon'tthinkthisisthewaytothepolicestation.”?Thejoggersimmediatelyrealizedsomethingwaswrong.TheysurroundedTimprotectivelyanddemandedanexplanationfromtheoldman.Theoldmanstammered,tryingtojustifytheirdirection.Oneofthejoggers,ayoungwoman,tookoutherphoneandcalledtheparkranger.Whilewaiting,theycomfortedTim,askinghimabouthishomeaddressandparents'contactinformation.Whentheparkrangerarrived,afterabriefinv