專題05 美好品質(zhì)-備戰(zhàn)2022年上海中考英語(yǔ)書面表達(dá)滿分攻略（解析版）

（一）（2021年金山一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“_____isimportant.”以“______isimportant(________是重要的)”為題，寫一篇至少60個(gè)單詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。Codylikedthefreedomthatcamewithhisfirstsummerjob.HeworkedatMitchell’sFarmwherepeoplecouldcomeandpickthecorn,berriesandtomatoesoutinthefieldsthemselves.Thenthey’dbringtheirproducetocheckoutstand,whereCodywouldweighitandcharge(收費(fèi))theappropriateprice.Mr.andMrs.Mitchellwereusuallybusysomewhereelse,soCodywastrustedtomanagethestandbyhimself.Forthemostpart,CodyobeyedtheMitchell’srules.Whensomeoneaskedforadiscountorasample,Codysaidno.Buthedidsometimeschangetherulesforfriends,muchtotheirdelight.“Goahead,tasteafewberriesbeforeIweigh,”he’dsaywhenitwassomeoneheknew.Itwasagainsttherulestoeatsomethingbeforeyouboughtit,buteveryonewantedto.Oneday,amancametostandwithabasketofcornhehadpicked.Codyweighedtheearsofcornandtoldthemanhowmuchitcost.Themanlookedconfused.“ButIwashereyesterday,andyoutoldsomeonethatforeveryfiveearsyoubuy,yougetonefree,”hesaid.Codyhaditinhismemory.HehadindeedofferedthatdealtotheThomases,whohappenedtobehisneighbors.Nowhefeltsadaboutit.HesawMrs.Mitchellworkingcloseby.HowwasCodygoingtoexplainthathehadgivenadealtothoseheknewwhilehemadeeveryoneelsepayfullprice?ThemansawthatCodywaslookingatMrs.Mitchell,“Isthattheowner?MayIspeaktoher?”heasked.Codythoughtaboutofferingthemanthesamediscount,buttherewerepeopleinlinebehindhim,andtheywerecarryingcorn,too.CodyhunghisheadandwalkedovertoseenMrs.Mitchel.男孩Cody的暑期工作經(jīng)歷告訴我們，遵守規(guī)則，保持誠(chéng)信，勇?lián)?zé)任和公平待人等是非常重要的品質(zhì)。請(qǐng)結(jié)合你自己的經(jīng)歷和感悟，分享你的一個(gè)故事，談?wù)勀銓?duì)某一種優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)的理解與感受。（注意：1.短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生姓名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。2.照抄閱讀語(yǔ)篇不給分。）遵守規(guī)則（followtherules）保持誠(chéng)信（keephonest）勇?lián)?zé)任（takeresponsibility）公平待人（befairtoothers）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文FollowingtherulesisimportantInourdailylife,therearemanyrulesforustofollow.Followingtherulescanmaketheworldinordersothateveryone'stimewon'tbewasted.Buttherearealwayssomepeopletryingtobreaktherules,justtoshowhowdifferenttheyare.Someeventhinksitiscooltodoit.Recently,Iwasridingmyslidingplateintherailwaystation.Ipaidnoattentiontothestaffs'warningandjustkeptthewayIwas.Ievenshoutedatthestaff.Atlast,whenapolicemancame,Iapologizedandpromisednottodoitagain.Ionlythoughtaboutmyselfandignoredtherules.WhatIdidwastedeverybody'stime.Fromthenon,Imustfollowtherules.【解析】【分析】【詳解】1.題干解讀：本文屬于材料作文寫作，根據(jù)所給材料，作者以“遵守規(guī)則很重要”為題展開，首先介紹了遵守規(guī)則的重要性，接著點(diǎn)出有些人為什么會(huì)不遵守規(guī)則，為自己的故事作鋪墊，最后表達(dá)了自己的決心。2.寫作指導(dǎo)：本文采用第三人稱和第一人稱行文，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和過(guò)去時(shí)交替使用，清楚明了；文章開頭和最后介紹遵守規(guī)則的重要性以及自己的感受時(shí)，有正反論述，說(shuō)理到位；描述自己的故事時(shí)，詳細(xì)完整，具體生動(dòng)。（二）（2021年楊浦區(qū)二模）Writeatleast60wordsonthegiventopic“________haschangedme”.(以“________改變了我”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)世間瞬息萬(wàn)變，凡事都在變化、都在發(fā)展，我們也在不斷地調(diào)整、改變自己。某些人、事、經(jīng)歷改變著我們的心態(tài)、行為、價(jià)值觀、思維方式、生活方式等。請(qǐng)結(jié)合題目和自己的經(jīng)歷，談一談自己的改變。注意：1.短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名等個(gè)人信息，否則不予評(píng)分。2.照抄閱讀語(yǔ)篇不得分。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ConfidencehaschangedmeRecentlyI’vehadachangeinmylife.Itmakesmerealizethathowimportantitisformetobeconfident.Thestoryhappenedayearago.AtthattimeIwasverypooratmathandmymathsscorewassodisappointingthatIbecamemadatmyself.ButmyteachertoldmethatIcouldhavedonemuchbetterifIbelievedinmyself.EverytimeImetwithsomemathsproblems,Itoldmyself“Youshouldbeconfidentandyoucandoit”.Andoutofmyexpectation,IgotanAinmymathsexamamonthlater.NotuntilthendidIrealizeIhadagiftformathsandthereisnothingthatwecannotdoifweareconfidentenough.（三）（2020年閔行一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Thepowerofteamwork”（以“團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的力量”為題，寫一篇不少于60詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）當(dāng)今社會(huì)，團(tuán)隊(duì)合作越來(lái)越重要。我們每個(gè)人在日常生活或?qū)W習(xí)中都曾感受過(guò)團(tuán)隊(duì)合作力量，如今團(tuán)隊(duì)比賽或合作完成一項(xiàng)任務(wù)時(shí)。請(qǐng)以“Thepowerofteamwork”為題，結(jié)合自己的一次經(jīng)歷，談?wù)勼w會(huì)。（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】ThepowerofteamworkNowdays，teamworkisveryimportantforustodoathingwell.Itisquiteoftenthatonepersonisunabletocarryoutajobbyhimselforherself.HeorSheneedsmorepeopletodoittogether.Ihavetosaythatsomeworkcan’tbefinishedwithoutteamwork.Forexample,abasketballgame.Everymemberinourteamplaysanimportantroleinthegame.Allmembersmustcooperatewitheachothertofightagainstthecompetingteam.Ifwedoagoodjobtogether,wecanwinintheend.Ifwedon’tdoittogether,wemaybedefeatedbyourcompetingteam.Allinall,teamworkisveryimportantnotonlynowbutalsointhefuture.【解析】【詳解】1.題干解析：題目要求我們一篇短文，短文以“團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的力量”為題，短文要結(jié)合自己的經(jīng)歷去寫，談?wù)勼w會(huì)，短文中不能出現(xiàn)任何人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息。2.例文點(diǎn)評(píng)：開頭說(shuō)明團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的重要性，接著具體舉例生活當(dāng)中的打籃球運(yùn)動(dòng)需要合作，談?wù)摵献鞯闹匾浴Ｗ詈罂偨Y(jié)，合作很重要。3.高分亮點(diǎn)：短語(yǔ)：carryout；byoneself；notonly…butalso…；playaimportantrole；doagoodjob；intheend；allinall。句型：itisimportantforsbtodosth；if引導(dǎo)的狀語(yǔ)從句。（四）（2021年寶山區(qū)二模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“______mademeabetterperson.”(請(qǐng)以“……使我成為更好的自己”為題，寫一篇至少60個(gè)單詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）生活中往往有許多人或事幫助我們成為更好的自己。也許是曾經(jīng)的某一次經(jīng)歷或者某個(gè)人使我們發(fā)現(xiàn)了自己的潛力與天賦；使我們由依賴到獨(dú)立，敢于選擇、敢于承擔(dān)責(zé)任；使我們勇于面對(duì)未知，嘗試新經(jīng)驗(yàn)，主動(dòng)做出改變。請(qǐng)補(bǔ)全標(biāo)題并結(jié)合過(guò)去的真實(shí)經(jīng)歷，談一談什么促使你成為更好的自己，你又在哪些方面做出了改變。(注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)姓名、校名等個(gè)人信息，否則不予評(píng)分。)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AnExperienceintheRainMademeaBetterPersonInthepassingdaysofmyjuniorhighschoollife,aremarkablyimpressiveandunforgettableexperiencealwayslingersinmymind,makingmeabetterpersoneversince.OneheavyrainingSaturdayafternoon,whenIwasonmywaytothetutoringcenternearmyhome,Iwitnessedanelderlymanstumblingbehindhiswheelchaironthemainroadwithoutanumbrellainhishands.Hesitatingandstruggling,Ididn’thaveanycouragetocomeclosetothemanatfirst,but20seconds(maybemorethanthat)later,aclearvoice—alwaysbereadytohelpothers—drovemetoextendmyhelpinghand.Intheend,Iaccompaniedtheelderlymanwithmyumbrellatohishome.Itwasanexperiencethatmademeabetterpersonandremindedmetotakeashareofsocialresponsibilitywithoutanyhesitation.（五）（2021年黃浦區(qū)二模）Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.(根據(jù)以下情景寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。）在生活中，要取得成就，往往需要勇氣。你需要勇氣來(lái)幫助你戰(zhàn)勝困難，承認(rèn)錯(cuò)誤，拒絕他人，或者克服恐懼。你是如何理解勇氣的呢？請(qǐng)以“Ihavethecourageto...（我有勇氣……）”為題，結(jié)合自己的經(jīng)歷談?wù)勀銓?duì)勇氣的理解和感受。注意：1.短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名等個(gè)人信息，否則不予評(píng)分。照抄閱讀語(yǔ)篇不得分。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IhavethecouragetofacemyfearIusedtobeacoward,justlikeJerryinhisclassmateseyes.Iamafraidofgettingapoorscore,Iamafraidofchangesinmylife,andIameverafraidtogotobathroomaloneatnight.Idon’twanttoriskanythingtoseetheworld.SoIhardlygooutforaholiday.OnceaclassmatewhoIreallylikedcameuptomeandaskedwhetherI’dliketohaveatriptothenearbycitywithher.Iagreed.WhenIcameback,Istillrememberedthedifferentthingsanddeliciousfoodinthatcity,whichIhadnevermetbefore.FeardisappearedandIrealizedthatIhavethecouragetofacemyfear.（六）（2019年松江區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Itriedmybestto____”(以“我盡全力______了”為題，寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格。)每個(gè)人都有一段為實(shí)現(xiàn)自己某個(gè)目標(biāo)而竭盡全力的經(jīng)歷，請(qǐng)你補(bǔ)全題目，介紹自己的某次拼搏過(guò)程并談?wù)勛约旱乃兴?。（注意?.在答題紙上講題目補(bǔ)充完整。短文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)人名，校名及其他相關(guān)信息，否則不予評(píng)分。）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ItriedmybesttolearntosmileFrommypointofview,Ioncesufferedalotinthepast.EverytimeItriedmybest,butIfailedatlast,whichmademeupset.Nowadays,Iamexhausted.SoIhavenochoicebuttosmile.Afterall,smileisanattitudetowardslife.Asweallknow,lifeisnotalwayssmoothandsomethingsadwillhappentous,suchasfailureintheexam.However,weshouldlearntosmiletoourselves.Smilemakesusfeelmoreconfident.Ifwesmiletotheothers,wewillbemuchclosertoourfriends.Smileisthecommonlanguagethroughoutthewholeworldthateveryonecanunderstand.Therefore,inordertomakelifebetter,justkeepsmilingtoourselvesaswellastoeveryonearoundus.IbelieveIcandoitbymyself.本次松江區(qū)作文采用的體裁是記敘文，題目屬于半命題作文，需要考生把題目補(bǔ)充完整“Itriedmybestto_______”,橫線上要填的是個(gè)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)，選擇的范圍還是蠻廣泛的，比如“l(fā)earntosmile”“overcomethedifficulty”“achievegoodmarks”“takepartintheMathscompetition”等等，主要是介紹自己的某次拼搏過(guò)程并談?wù)勛约旱乃兴?。同時(shí)，在審題的過(guò)程中要注意時(shí)態(tài)的選擇，在介紹自己的某次拼搏過(guò)程時(shí)，采用“一般過(guò)去時(shí)”，談自己的感悟時(shí)要回歸現(xiàn)在，用“一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)”。（七）（2019年靜安區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Thiswasmypromise"(請(qǐng)以“這就是我的承諾"為題,寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文,標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格.)承諾是一份責(zé)任,也是一種素養(yǎng).在你的成長(zhǎng)過(guò)程中,對(duì)家人、老師、朋友、同學(xué)和社會(huì)有過(guò)哪些與承諾有關(guān)的經(jīng)歷和感觸呢?請(qǐng)結(jié)合自己的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷,選取一個(gè)角度,講述一個(gè)具體事例.(注意:短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息,否則不予評(píng)分.標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)Thefollowingisforreferenceonly(以下表述僅供參考)1.beresponsiblemise(sb.)that...3.make/keep/breakone’spromise________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：ThisismypromiseWealwayssaythatpromiseisveryimportant,butwhenitcomestothemoney,notsomanypeoplecankeeptheirpromise.Ikeepmypromiseallthetime,becauseifIbreakthepromise,myfriendswon’ttrustmeanymore.Once,Iwenttoashopwhichwasnearmyhouse,Iwantedtodelivertheexpress.WhenIfinishedwritingtheinformationonthelist,IsuddenlythoughtaboutthatIforgottobringthemoney.Iwasworried,soItoldtheboss,hesmiledandsaiditwouldbeOKtogivehimthemoneynexttime.Iwassosurprised,hedaredtodoit,otherswouldthinkthatIwouldnevercomebackagain.WhenIwenthome,Ikeptitinmymind,thenItookthemoneyandrantotheshop.Ikeptmypromisetoreturnthemoney.（八）（2019年普陀區(qū)一模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic“Ilearnedtobe______throughaschoolactivity”【以“通過(guò)一次學(xué)校活動(dòng)我變得...”為題，寫一篇不少于60字的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格?！刻崾荆撼踔兴哪昴阋欢▍⒓恿瞬簧賹W(xué)校活動(dòng)，也從中學(xué)到了不少東西，請(qǐng)就其中一次活動(dòng)的經(jīng)歷和收獲寫一篇短文。（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名，校名及其他相關(guān)信息。）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】IlearnedtoberesponsiblethroughaschoolactivityThereisnodoubtthateveryonehastakenpartinvarietiesofactivitiesinthepastfouryear,whichhaveagreateffectonus.Infact,Ileanedalotfromthoseactivities,especiallyasocialsurveywedid.Lastterm,ourteacheraskedustodoasocialsurveyaboutenvironmentprotectionandIwasassignedastheteamleader.Tobeginwith,Ididn’tknowwheretostartandhowtodoasurvey.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Isawmyteammates,whoshowedtheirtrustonme.IsuddenlyrealizedasaleaderIshouldtrymybesttoleadmyteamtocompletethetask.Withthehelpofmyteacherandteammates,wedidawonderfulsurvey.Fromthenon,IlearnedthatIshouldberesponsible.（九）水滴石穿，繩鋸木斷。堅(jiān)持做好一件事情，成就更好的自己。請(qǐng)以“OnethingIkeepdoingeveryday”為題，根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)和要求，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇發(fā)言稿，參加學(xué)校的英語(yǔ)主題演講活動(dòng)。要求：1）文中不要出現(xiàn)所在學(xué)校的校名和師生姓名；2）詞數(shù)100左右（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。OnethingIkeepdoingeverydayGoodmorning,everyone!Iamveryhappytobeheretomakeaspeechtoday.ThetopicofmyspeechisonethingIkeepdoingeveryday.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________That’sall.Thankyou!【答案】OnethingIkeepdoingeverydayGoodmorning,everyone!Iamveryhappytobeheretomakeaspeechtoday.ThetopicofmyspeechisonethingIkeepdoingeveryday.IloverunningandIhavekeptrunningforthreeyears.WhenIwasinGrade7,Iwasnotgoodatsportsandrunningwasalwaysmyweakness.Ioftenfailedinmyrunningtest.Inordertocatchupwithmyclassmates,Ibegantopracticerunningeverydayafterschool.Sometimes,IwassotiredthatIreallywantedtogiveup.ButIkepttellingmyselfthatIcouldmakeit.NomatterwhatkindofdifficultyIfaced,Itriedmybesttokeeprunning.NowIdomuchbetterinrunning.I’mveryproudofmyselfandI’mreadyforanychallengeinthefuture.That’sall.Thankyou!【詳解】1.題干解讀：本文是一篇演講稿。要求以“OnethingIkeepdoingeveryday”為題，根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容進(jìn)行寫作，注意要點(diǎn)齊全，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。2.寫作指導(dǎo)：寫作時(shí)要以第一人稱來(lái)介紹，時(shí)態(tài)綜合使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)。作文可分為三段，第一段引出話題；第二段介紹自己堅(jiān)持做的事、這么做的理由以及給自己帶來(lái)的影響和改變；第三段收尾。要保證語(yǔ)言連貫，無(wú)語(yǔ)法和拼寫錯(cuò)誤。（十）（2020年虹口區(qū)二模）Writepassageofatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“KindnessEverywhere”.以“善意無(wú)處不在”為題寫一篇不少于60個(gè)詞的短文,標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)不占格)提示:閱讀D篇提到了三種善意:interpersonalkindness;environmentalkindness;personalkindness.請(qǐng)你從中選擇比較有感觸的一種,結(jié)合具體事例,談?wù)勀愕南敕ā?注意短文中不得出現(xiàn)任何真實(shí)人名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息,否則不予評(píng)分。)_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________