十句話搞定讀后續(xù)寫6課件高三下學期英語一輪復習專項

十句話搞定讀后續(xù)寫6

十句五定法讀一、讀什么：讀材料（一般是記敘文）＋讀提示句（讀關(guān)鍵詞）。

時間不夠讀首尾段二、怎么讀：1.找信息——who/where/when/what/why/how2.思考——readforcharacters人物/plot情節(jié)/conflict沖突/emotionalchange情感變化/theme主題3.讀的過程中圈畫關(guān)鍵信息，重要細節(jié)內(nèi)容（用以細節(jié)呼應），好的句式（用以仿寫）三、讀完之后要明白：文章主人公是誰，文章主要情節(jié)，待解決的問題，人物情緒變化與文章主題。第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

AuntEviehadadollhouse.Ithadmanytoysthere.EveryFridayafternoon,IwenttoAuntEvie'shomewithmyparents.Theadultswouldsitaroundatableinthediningroom,eatingpieandtalking,whileIplayedinthedollhouseforhours.SometimesIwouldpickuptheselovelytoysandplacethemindifferentpositions.Itwasreallyfun.OnetimeIaskedAuntEviewhereshegotthetoyssothatIcouldbuysome,too.Tomydisappointment,AuntEviesaidthatmostofthemwerespeciallyhandmadegiftsfromherfriendsandcouldn'tbeboughtanywhere.Onesuchtoywasalittlebear,whichwasmyfavourite.ItwassobeautifulthatIwantedtoownitbadly.“IfItakeit,AuntEviemaynotnoticeit，”Isaidtomyself.

Therefore,onaFridayafternoon,IattemptedtotakethelittlebearawayfromAuntEvie'sdollhouse.Ihadtowaituntilnobodywaswatchingme,andittookmehourstogetthecouragetoputthelittlebearinmypocket.OnceIgotthelittlebear,Icouldn'twaittogohome.Ihadtohideitsomewhereathome,sothatnoonewouldknowItookit.ThatnightafterIwenthomewithmyparents,Icouldn'tgotosleep.“WhatabadpersonIam!IstolesomethingfrommylovedAuntEvie，”Ithought.WhenIwokeupthenextmorning,Ifeltawful,butIcouldn'ttellmyparents,letalonereturnthelittlebeartoAuntEvie.Iwasembarrassedaboutmybehaviour.Atsomepoint,Istartedtohatethelittlebearandmyself.AndIknewifIdidn'tdosomething,Iwouldn'tgetawayfromthosebadfeelings.

注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2．請按如下格式作答。

SoIdecidedtotellmymotherwhatIhaddone.

MyhandwasshakingwhenIrangthedoorbellofAuntEvie'shouse.

[前文大意]

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者每周五下午都會去埃維阿姨家里玩，而且對她家玩具屋里的玩具非常著迷。作者非常喜歡其中的一只小熊玩偶，那是姨媽的朋友特別手工制作的禮物，在商店里買不到。一天，作者趁著沒有人注意時偷走了小熊玩偶?；丶液?，作者感到極度內(nèi)疚和羞愧，無法入睡，對自己的行為感到厭惡，甚至開始討厭那只小熊玩偶和自己。1．段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“所以我決定告訴媽媽我做了什么”可知，第一段可描寫作者向媽媽坦白，媽媽建議作者歸還小熊。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“當我按響埃維阿姨家的門鈴時，我的手在顫抖”可知，第二段可描寫作者去埃維阿姨家歸還小熊并道歉的過程。2．續(xù)寫線索：坦白——媽媽的建議——鼓足勇氣向埃維阿姨家走去——歸還小熊并道歉——埃維阿姨原諒了作者，并將小熊玩偶贈送給作者——作者的感悟3.理解原文，明確續(xù)寫方向

故事主線：主人公偷了阿姨的玩具熊，內(nèi)心愧疚，最終決定坦白。

情感變化：從“想要玩具”→“偷竊后的短暫滿足”→“強烈的自責”→“決定改正錯誤”。

人物成長：犯錯

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認錯

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成長續(xù)寫需要圍繞“承認錯誤—獲得原諒—領(lǐng)悟道理”展開，確保邏輯合理、情感真摯。

十句五定法paragraph11銜接para1提示句（接著para1首句往下寫）2345銜接para2提示句（根據(jù)para2首句倒推寫）paragraph26銜接para2提示句（接著para2首句往下寫）789

結(jié)尾（正能量）10

升華主題寫剩余五句補齊細節(jié)情緒動作心理語言環(huán)境描寫para1：

SoIdecidedtotellmymotherwhatIhaddone.

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MyhandwasshakingwhenIrangthedoorbellofAuntEvie'shouse.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________接下來可描寫作者去埃維阿姨家歸還小熊并道歉的過程,以及最后我的感悟。所以我決定告訴媽媽我做了什么。如何向母親坦白？母親的反應如何？當我按響埃維阿姨家的門鈴時，我的手在顫抖。如何面對阿姨？阿姨會怎么回應？接下來可描寫作者向媽媽坦白，媽媽建議作者歸還小熊第一句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第二句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________猶豫如何開口（動作+心理描寫）坦白時的語言+情緒（結(jié)巴、流淚）Iheldthelittlebeartightly,myheartpoundingasIstoodbesidemymother’sbed.十句五定法："Mom,I...ItooksomethingfromAuntEvie’sdollhouse,"Istammered,tearswellingupinmyeyes.或Istammeredandcouldn’tholdbackmytears.第三句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第四句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________我的忐忑心理

（愧疚+恐懼）Seizedwithfright,Istoodfrozentothespot,thinkingAuntEviewouldhateme.母親的第一反應（驚訝/失望，但冷靜）Mymothershookherheadindisappointment.“There'sonlyonewaytomakethisright.YouhavetoreturnthelittlebearandapologizetoAuntEvie，”shesaid.第五句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第六句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________我的行動（過渡到下一段）

Eventually,withmymother'sencouragement,IgotupthecouragetoheadforAuntEvie'shome.阿姨的反應（溫和，可能早有察覺）

Sheunlockedthedoor,smiledandlookedasifshealreadykneweverything.第七句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第八句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________我的道歉行為（遞出玩具，語言誠懇）阿姨的寬容回應（重點：原諒并賦予玩具新意義）Ipresentedherwiththelittlebearandmademyapologies.Insteadofscoldingme,shekneltdownandhuggedme，"Iadmireyourcouragetoreturnthebear.Iwouldliketogiveittoyouasagiftforyourhonesty.You'realwaysmyfavouriteniece，”第九句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第十句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________故事結(jié)局

（我的釋然）升華主題+結(jié)尾金句Onhearingthat,Ifeltawaveofrelief.Aswewalkedhome,Iheldthebeargently.It’snowaremindernotofguilt,butofcourage.Mymother'swordsranginmyears,“Honestyisthebestpolicy！”step1認真剖析首句，構(gòu)思段落內(nèi)容step2十句五定法

展開劇情para1para2考慮與上下文的融洽銜接和續(xù)寫第二段開頭語的呼應和銜接關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應根據(jù)具體語境弘揚感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美第1句：接著para1首句(心理/動作鏈）第5句：根據(jù)para2首句第6句：接著para2首句(心理/動作鏈）第9句：結(jié)局第10句：升華總結(jié)：step1讀原文，梳理信息，3-5分鐘step2構(gòu)思、初稿（十句五定法），10-15分鐘step3補充細節(jié)，寫剩下五句，潤色，定稿，10-15分鐘step4謄寫到答題卡上，5分鐘[參考范文]

SoIdecidedtotellmymotherwhatIhaddone.AfterItoldherallthestory,Icouldn'tholdbackmytears.“Ican'tlivewith