高考英語寫作復習：讀后續(xù)寫 自閉癥Sam與迷你豬Chester的奇妙相遇 講義

江蘇省無錫市2025屆高三秋學期期終教學質(zhì)量調(diào)研測試英語試題

第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

WhenSamwastwoyearsandtwomonthsold,hebegantoshuttheworldaway.Theonce-

happylittleboy,whowasalreadystartingtopickupwordsofbothEnglishandSpanish,suddenly

stoppedspeaking;stoppedlookinghisfamilyintheeye;stoppedcommunicatingaltogether.Most

ofthetime,allSamdidwaslieonthesofatouchinghisears.

Hestartedtodisplaycertainbehavioralchanges.Hebegantohavethisfunnythingwith

straightlineswherehewouldpickupatoyandlookatitsideways,orlieonhisfrontforhourson

end,rollingacarinfrontofhiseyes.

Withintwoyears,hismotherJovisitedoneexpertafteranotherwithSamandtriedvarious

treatmentmethods;however,nothingseemedtowork.Whatwasworse,inaboutthreeweeks

Sam'sgrandfatherdiedofcancer,hisparentsdivorcedandhisfamilywererobbed-andallthe

while,Samwasbecomingmoreandmorewithdrawn.Hiseyesweredead.

AnditwasthenthatSamwaseventuallydiagnosed（診斷）withautism（自閉癥）.

Asasinglemother,Johadnochoicebuttogostraighttoworkherselftoearnalivingwhile

researchingtheconditionandtryherbesttohelpSamtocomebackoutofhimself.ForJo,the

followingeightyearswasaterrifyingtime,watchinghersondisappearingjustinfrontofhereyes.

Allmethodstried,moneyrunningout,JohadnochoicebuttotakeSam,bynowcompletelynon-

verbal（不使用言語交際的），fromthehustleandbustle（喧囂）ofthecitytothecalmofthe

Devoncountryside.

Onceonalocalfarm,theycameacrossChester,aminipigbelongingtoafarmer.Itwasso

smallthattheydidn'tevenseeitatfirstsight.Astheywalkeddownthegrassland,theonlylittle

pigwashidinginthecorner.Helookedsadandlonely,likeSamoftendid.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Paragraph1:

WhenSamsawChester,hewentovertothelittlepigimmediately.

Paragraph2:

ThefarmeragreedandJotookChesterhome._

江蘇省無錫市2025屆高三秋學期期終教學質(zhì)量調(diào)研測試英語試題

第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

WhenSamwastwoyearsandtwomonths。/d（狀從），hebegantoshuttheworldaway（性格描寫）.

Theonce-happylittleboy,whowasalreadystartingtopickupwordsofbothEnglishand

Spanish（定從交代背景信息），suddenlystoppedspeaking;stoppedlookinghisfamilyintheeye;stopped

communicatingaltogether（并列,給出性格變化）.Mostofthetime,allSamdid（定從）waslieonthesofa

touchinghisears（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）.

Hestartedtodisplaycertainbehavioralchanges.Hebegantohavethisfunnythingwith

straight及（方式狀語）wherehewouldpickupafoyandlookatitsideways,orlieonhisfrontfor

hoursonend,rollingacarinfrontofhisoes（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）.

Withintwoyears,hismotherJovisitedoneexpertafteranotherwithSamandtriedvarious

treatmentmethods;however,nothingseemedtowork.Whatwasworse,inaboutthreeweeks

Sam'sgrandfatherdiedofcancer,hisparentsdivorcedandhisfamily/wererobbed（總分并列交代信息）

-andallthewhile,Samwasbecomingmoreandmorewi統(tǒng)draw”.Hiseyesweredead.

（"府瘋.（前面都是背景信息,此處

AnditwasthenthatSamwaseventuallydia史nosed（診斷）with1sTH

為核心信息總結(jié)）

Asasinglemother,Johadnochoicebuttogostraighttoworkherselftoearna萬v加g（目的狀

語）whileresearchingtheconditionandtryherbesttohelpSamtocomebackout0fhimself（狀a.

ForJo,thefollowingeightyearswasaterrifyingtime,watchinghersondisaDuearin史justin

frontofhereyes（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）.Allmethods"ied（獨立主格%moneyrunning/獨立主格2）,Jo

hadnochoicebuttotakeSam,bynowcompletelynon-verbal（不使用言語交際的）,方0。thehustle

andbustle（喳蜀ofthecitytothecalmoftheDeyo”（重要背景信息2）.

Onceonalocalfarm,theycameacrossChester,〃minipi史belon史in殳toafarmer（獨立主格）.It

wassosmallthattheydidn'tevenseeitatfirstsight（結(jié)果狀語從句）.Astheywalkeddownthe

（狀從動作描寫），theonlylittlepigwashidinginthecorner.Helookedsadandlonely,like

Samoftendid.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Paragraph1:

WhenSamsawChester,hewentovertothelittlepig

immediately.

Paragraph2:

ThefarmeragreedandJotookChesterhome._

1.高考英語讀后續(xù)寫分析

續(xù)寫類型分析

該文章屬于人物情感發(fā)展型續(xù)寫，通過細膩的情感轉(zhuǎn)折和人與動物之間的互動

推動故事發(fā)展。

構(gòu)思思路

?開頭段：描述Sam看到小豬Chester后，與小豬產(chǎn)生直接的互動。通過這種互動，

表現(xiàn)出Sam情感的首次破冰。

?第二段：Jo與農(nóng)民商議，最終決定帶Chester回家。這個決定是Jo為了Sam的康復

作出的，進一步推動了故事的發(fā)展。

布局框架

1.人物刻畫：Sam由孤僻內(nèi)向、情感封閉逐漸轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)楦兄酵饨绮⒈憩F(xiàn)出興趣。

2.情感層次：由最初的沉默與孤獨到與小豬互動產(chǎn)生的情感波動，再到母親為他做出

決定時的決心與期待。

3.關(guān)鍵情節(jié)點：Sam接觸Chester,首次展示情感的突破；母親決定帶Chester回家，

為Sam尋找希望。

4.情感轉(zhuǎn)折：從絕望的處境到希望的萌芽。

續(xù)寫要承接原文的事項

?情感承接：從原文Sam的封閉情感出發(fā)，續(xù)寫必須表現(xiàn)出Sam逐漸的情感突破與外

界的聯(lián)系。

?人物行為與心理：Sam與小豬的互動表現(xiàn)出情感的細膩變化。Jo作為母親的無奈與

希望也需要貫穿續(xù)寫。

續(xù)寫內(nèi)容設(shè)計要點

?互動發(fā)展：Sam和Chester的互動需要逐步加深，體現(xiàn)出Sam情感的逐漸打開。

?母子關(guān)系：Jo對Sam的悉心照料與她的決心與信念是貫穿續(xù)寫的核心。

2.StoryMountain思維導圖

分

析

內(nèi)容原文反應句

角

度

人

Sam和Jo的關(guān)系呈現(xiàn)出深刻的

物"Johadnochoicebuttogostraightto

母子情感。Sam情感封閉，Jo

刻workherself..."

則是一個孤獨而堅強的母親。

畫

分

析

內(nèi)容原文反應句

角

度

情

感從絕望到微弱的希望，情感逐"AnditwasthenthatSamwaseventually

層漸由封閉轉(zhuǎn)向開放。diagnosedwithautism."

次

關(guān)

鍵

Sam首次與Chester互動，產(chǎn)生"WhenSamsawChester,hewentoverto

情

情感波動。thelittlepigimmediately."

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點

語

言使用了沉重的描述突出了Sam

"Hiseyesweredead."

特的孤立無援。

色

關(guān)

鍵

"autism,""withdrawn,”“hustle

詞

andbustle,""calm"

分

析

心

"Theonce-happylittleboy,whowas

理Sam逐漸從封閉的情感世界走alreadystartingtopickupwordsofboth

描向外部互動。EnglishandSpanish,suddenlystopped

speaking..."

寫

動

作Sam接近Chester,并與其建立"WhenSamsawChester,hewentoverto

描某種形式的聯(lián)系。thelittlepigimmediately."

寫

分

析

內(nèi)容原文反應句

角

度

環(huán)

環(huán)境的寧靜和鄉(xiāng)村的氛圍為

境"JohadnochoicebuttotakeSam...from

Sam提供了一個情感治愈的空thehustleandbustleofthecitytothecalm

描

間。oftheDevoncountryside."

寫

隱

含人與動物之間的情感聯(lián)系與治"Chester,aminipig...helookedsadand

主愈。lonely,likeSamoftendid.”

題

情

感Sam的情感封閉逐漸被打開，"WhenSamsawChester,hewentoverto

轉(zhuǎn)首次表現(xiàn)出外部世界的興趣。thelittlepigimmediately."

折

空

從喧囂的城市到寧靜的鄉(xiāng)村，

間"Fromthehustleandbustleofthecityto

為故事的情感變化提供了背

轉(zhuǎn)thecalmoftheDevoncountryside."

景。

換

時

間從Sam被診斷出自閉癥后，時"Withintwoyears,hismotherJovisited

過間的推移讓Jo做出決策。oneexpertafteranother...*'

渡

3.推薦的英文例句（動作、心理、環(huán)境描寫）

動作描寫例句：

1.Sammovedclosertothelittlepig,hishandoutstretched.

2.JosmiledasshewatchedSaminteractwiththeanimal.

3.Witheverystephetook,Samseemedmorecurious.

4.Samgentlytouchedthepig'sear,feelingitssoftness.

5.Samleanedin,whisperingsomethingtothepig.

6.ThelittlepigsniffedSam'shandandnuzzledit.

7.Withslowmovements,Samcroucheddowntomeetthepig'seyes.

8.Sam'seyeslitupashesawthepig'stinytailwiggle.

心理描寫例句：

1.Samfeltasuddenwarmthspreadthroughhimashelookedatthepig.

2.AtinyflickerofhopesparkedinJo'sheartasshesawSamsmile.

3.Forthefirsttimeinyears,Sam'sfacesoftened.

4.Jo'sheartswelledwithemotionasshewatchedSam'stransformation.

5.Sam'schesttightened,buthefeltastrangesenseofcalminthepresenceofthepig.

6.Jo'sworriesmeltedawaywhenshesawtheconnectionbetweenSamandtheanimal.

7.AquietjoyfilledSamasherealizedhewasnolongeralone.

8.Joheldherbreath,hopingthatthismomentwouldleadtoabreakthrough.

環(huán)境描寫例句：

1.Thecoolbreezeofthecountrysidefilledtheair,offeringpeacetotheirwearysouls.

2.Thequietofthecountrysidewasastarkcontrasttothebustlingcitytheyleftbehind.

3.Thefarmwassurroundedbygreenpastures,offeringasereneatmosphere.

4.Therollinghillsinthedistanceseemedtopromisepeaceandtranquility.

5.Thesunlightdappledthroughthetrees,castingsoftshadowsonthegrass.

6.Thefarmsmelledoffreshhayandearthysoil,soothingthesenses.

7.Thesoundofbirdschirpingaddedatouchoflivelinesstotheotherwisestilllandscape.

8.Thegentlerustlingoftheleavesprovidedacomfortingbackdroptotheirquietmoments.

高級替換詞：

?Curious—Inquisitive,Interested,Fascinated,Eager,Puzzled

?Calm一Peaceful,Serene,Tranquil,Placid,Quiet

?Sad一Downcast,Depressed,Melancholy,Sorrowful,Dismal

?Hope—Optimism,Expectation,Faith,Aspiration,Anticipation

?Smile—Grin,Beam,Showteeth,Flashasmile,Smirk

4.語法現(xiàn)象與搭配分析

高中語法現(xiàn)象

1.定語從句

例句："Theonce-happylittleboy,whowasalreadystartingtopickupwordsofbothEnglish

andSpanish,suddenlystoppedspeaking."

o詞性分析:“who”引導定語從句，修飾“boy”。

o搭配："pickupwords"=學習單詞

o同義詞："acquirewords"

2.賓語從句

例句："Johadnochoicebuttogostraighttoworkherselftoearnalivingwhileresearching

thecondition.''

o詞性分析："toearnalivingwhileresearchingthecondition”是賓語從句，修飾

“g。”.

o搭配："earnaliving"=掙錢生計

o同義詞："makealiving"

詞匯分析

Withdrawn(adj.)=內(nèi)向的，孤立的

?

o同義詞：Reclusive,Isolated,Detached

o反義詞：Sociable,Outgoing

o例句："Hebecamewithdrawnafterthetragedy/

?

Diagnosed(v.)=診斷

?

o同義詞:Identified,Recognized

o反義詞：Misdiagnosed

o例句：nSamwasdiagnosedwithautismafternumeroustests."

PossibleVersions

Version1:

Paragraph1:WhenSamsawChester,heweRovertothelittlepigimmediately.

Atfirst,heobserveditfromadistance,hiscuriosity（獨立主格）.Slowly,he

croucheddownandextendedhishandtowardsthepig（動作描寫），whoseemedtonotice

Sam'sapproach俄4.Therewasabriefmomentofhesitation,butthenthepigtooka

/igwstepscloser,sniffingSant'shandcautiously（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）.Afaintsmile

aDDeayedonSam's%ce（情緒插寫）,somethingthathadn7beenseeninmonths俄4.The

atmosDhereshifted（環(huán)境軸寫）asJowatchedfrombehind佻仄動作描寫）,herheartfilledwith

cautiousoptimism（獨立主格補充描寫J。的狀態(tài)）.Couldthisbethebreakthroughshehadbeen

desperatelywaiting也，（定從設(shè)問）？Sheapproachedthefarmerandaskediftheycould

buythepig（賓從）,

Paragraph2:Thefarmeragreed,andJotookChesterhome.Onthewayback,

Samremainedsilent,buthiseyesfollowedChester^everymovement（動作描寫）.Asthey

settledintotheirnewhomeinthecountryside佻4,Sambe^antoshowsubtlesi^nsof

change.HewouldoftensitnearChester,watchingthe（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）asit

roamedthegarde九（狀從動作描寫）.Gradually,hestartedtospeakagain,hisvoicesoftbut

,

選”（獨立主格）.Jocouldntbelieveit.The"esenceofChesterhadwive%hersonc

reasontoco""。"oncemore.J。feltanoverwhebningsenseofreliefandhopeas

sherealized（時間狀從）thathersonwasslowlyreturningto/re,（賓從）.

Version2

Paragraph1:WhenSamsawChester,heovertothelittlepigimmediately.

Hekneltdownbesideitandbegantogentlypetitsback（動作福寫kneeldownandpet）?Forthe

firsttimeinalongwhile,Sam飛eyessoftened、showin殳aglimmerofaffection（現(xiàn)在分詞

做伴隨動作）.Chesterseemedtoenjoytheattention,leanin史intoSam's勿〃c〃（現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨動

作）.Jo,standing（現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨動作）,watchedthescenewithasenseofdisbelief（方式狀

語）.Herson,whohadbeensodistantforso（定從），wasnowinteractingwiththe

littlepiginsuchatenderway（動作描寫）.ItwasasthoughChesterhadunlocked

somethingwithinSam（.thathadbeenburieddeep俄4.Justthen,shesincerely

askedthefarmeriftheycouldbuythepig（賓從），

Paragraph2:Thefarmeragreed,andJotookChesterhome.Thatevening,Sam

spenthourswiththepig,sittingonthe/Zoo"現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作），staringatitwith

鹿（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）.Slowly,Sambegantomakesmallsounds,tryingto

mimicChester'sgrunts（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴誨動作）.Jowasoverjoyedtoseethesesmallsteps.

（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）theywereasigndprogress（賓從）.Everyday,Samgrewmore

attachedtoChester,andhisspeechb彼anto（變化描寫）.Joknewthattheir

journeywasfarfromouer＞（賓從）butforthefirsttimeinyears,shefeltthattherewas

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hopeforSamsrecoye/j（賓從）.

Version3

Paragraph1:WhenSamsawChester,hewe加overtothelittlepigimmediately.

Hishandstrembledslightly（動作反應情緒）ashereachedouttotouchitssoft九以狀從動作描寫）.

Chesterdidn'tmoveaway,instead,itnuzzledSam'shand（狀從）.asifreassuring

地絲（狀從壓縮形式）.Theconnectionbetweenthemwasimmediate,andSam/ig"awarmth

spreadthroughhischest（情緒描寫）.Forthefirsttimeinalongtime,hewasn'tafraidto

reachouttoanotherlivingcreature.Jostoodquietly,watchin殳thetransformation

unfoldbeforehereyes（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）.ShecouldhardlybelievethatSam,onceso

迎她史坦（對比引用，較好的銜接前文）,wasnowshowingsignsoflifeagain（賓雙）.Hardlyto

coverherdelight,Sheapproachedthefarmerandaskediftheycouldbuythepig（賓從）.

Paragraph2:Thefarnieyagreed,andJotookChesterhome.ScunPbondwith

thepi殳deepenedasthedayspassed（狀從時間變化）.HewouldtalktoChester,sharinghis

thoughtsinsoftmurmurs（現(xiàn)在分詞短語做伴隨動作）.Josawthechangesmoreclearlynow;

Sam'soncepacazx。gazehadbecomefocused,andhisspeech,thoughstillhesitant,

wasclearer.Everyday,Sam'semotionalwallsseemedtocrumblebitb、力彷情緒變化描寫）、

andJoknewthatChesterhadbecomeabridgeforhersontoreconnectwiththe

world（賓灰）.

高中語法加分點分析

1.

定語從句

伊J句:"TheatmosphereshiftedasJowatchedfrombehind,herheartfilled

withcautiousoptimism."

1.詞性分析："asJowatchedfrombehind”為時間狀語從句，修飾主句"the

atmosphereshifted"0

2.搭配："watchfrombehind”=從背后觀察

3.同義詞："observequietly"

賓語從句

例句:"JoknewthatChesterhadbecomeabridgeforhersontoreconnect

withtheworld.n

1.詞性分析："thatChesterhadbecomeabridgeforhersontoreconnectwiththe

world"為賓語從句，修飾動詞"knew”。

2.搭配："becomeabridge”二成為橋梁

3.同義詞："serveasaconnection"

狀語從句

伊J句:"Forthefirsttimeinalongwhile,Sam'seyessoftened,showinga

glimmerofaffection."

1.詞性分析："Forthefirsttimeinalongwhile"為時間狀語。

2.搭配："forthefirsttime"=第一次

3.同義詞："afteralongtime”

情緒描寫、動作描寫亮點詞匯短語

情緒描寫

?Cautiousoptimism

?Aglimmerofaffection

?Overwhelmingsenseofrel