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專題02賽果擷英-比賽收獲類讀后續(xù)寫技巧精研

一、比賽收獲類寫作導(dǎo)圖

確定核心收獲,如技能提升、心態(tài)轉(zhuǎn)變

挖掘深層意義,聯(lián)系成長、價(jià)值觀

比賽背景,含賽事類型、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)

比賽過程,描述關(guān)鍵事件、沖突

收獲成果,闡述知識(shí)、能力、情感收獲

開頭引入,用懸念、場(chǎng)景描寫吸引讀者

結(jié)構(gòu)搭建X中間展開,按時(shí)間或邏輯順序敘述

結(jié)尾升華,總結(jié)感悟,表達(dá)未來展望

運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯,替換常見表達(dá)

語言技巧使用復(fù)雜句式,如定語從句、倒裝句

修辭手法,比喻、擬人增添文采

——連接詞,如however、moreover

邏輯連貫一過渡句,承上啟下

、一首尾呼應(yīng),強(qiáng)化主題

二、分步解讀寫作導(dǎo)圖

(一)主題與立意確定核心收獲:

1.確定核心收獲:

在寫作前,需要明確從比賽中獲得的主要收獲。這可以是具體的技能提升,比如英語聽說讀

寫能力的提高,或者是在團(tuán)隊(duì)協(xié)作、時(shí)間管理方面的進(jìn)步;也可以是心態(tài)上的轉(zhuǎn)變,例如從

緊張焦慮到自信從容,從害怕失敗到勇于挑戰(zhàn)等。

2.挖掘深層意義:

不能僅僅停留在表面的收獲,還要深入思考這些收獲對(duì)個(gè)人成長和價(jià)值觀的影響。比如,通

過比賽認(rèn)識(shí)到努力和堅(jiān)持的重要性,體會(huì)到友誼和互助的力量,或者對(duì)自己未來的學(xué)習(xí)和生

活有了新的規(guī)劃和目標(biāo)。

(二)內(nèi)容構(gòu)思比賽背景:

1.賽事類型:

說明參加的是哪種英語比賽,如英語演講比賽、英語寫作競(jìng)賽、英語戲劇表演比賽等,不同

的賽事類型會(huì)有不同的側(cè)重點(diǎn)和收獲。

2.時(shí)間、地點(diǎn):

簡要提及比賽的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn),讓讀者對(duì)比賽的背景有一個(gè)清晰的了解,也為后續(xù)的敘述提供

一個(gè)具體的情境。

3.比賽過程:

描述比賽過程中發(fā)生的關(guān)鍵事件和沖突。例如,在演講比賽中可能遇到忘詞的尷尬時(shí)刻,在

寫作競(jìng)賽中可能面臨時(shí)間緊張的壓力,在團(tuán)隊(duì)比賽中可能與隊(duì)友出現(xiàn)意見分歧等。通過對(duì)這

些事件的描述,可以使文章更加生動(dòng)有趣,吸引讀者的注意力。

4.收獲成果:

(1)知識(shí)收獲:闡述在比賽中學(xué)習(xí)到的新的英語知識(shí),如語法、詞匯、表達(dá)方式等。

(2)能力收獲:說明比賽對(duì)自己英語應(yīng)用能力的提升,如口語表達(dá)能力、寫作能力、閱讀

速度和理解能力、聽力捕捉關(guān)鍵信息的能力等。同時(shí),也可以提及其他相關(guān)能力的發(fā)展,如

溝通能力、應(yīng)變能力、創(chuàng)新能力等。

(3)情感收獲:分享在比賽中體驗(yàn)到的情感,如對(duì)英語的熱愛更加深厚,對(duì)團(tuán)隊(duì)成員的感

激之情,對(duì)自己成長的欣慰等。

(三)結(jié)構(gòu)搭建開頭引入:

1.采用懸念、場(chǎng)景描寫等方式吸引讀者

以比賽前的緊張氛圍描寫作為開頭或者設(shè)置一個(gè)懸念

TheairintheauditoriumwasthickwithnervousnessasIsteppedontothestagefortheEnglish

speechcompetition.當(dāng)我走上英語演講比賽的舞臺(tái)時(shí),禮堂里的空氣因緊張而變得凝重。

IwalkedintotheEnglishwritingcontestwithamixofexcitementandtrepidation,littledidIknow

thatthisexperiencewouldchangemeinwaysIcouldneverhaveimagined.我懷著既興奮又緊張

的心情走進(jìn)英語寫作比賽的考場(chǎng),卻不知道這次經(jīng)歷會(huì)以我無法想象的方式改變我。

2.中間展開

按照時(shí)間順序或者邏輯順序敘述比賽的過程和自己的收獲。如果按照時(shí)間順序,可以依次描

述比賽前的準(zhǔn)備、比賽中的經(jīng)歷以及比賽后的感受;如果按照邏輯順序,可以先闡述比賽中

遇到的困難,然后說明自己是如何克服的,最后總結(jié)從中獲得的收獲。

3.結(jié)尾升華

總結(jié)自己在比賽中的感悟,表達(dá)對(duì)未來的展望。

ThiscompetitionhasnotonlyenhancedmyEnglishskillsbutalsomademerealizethepowerof

perseverance.IlookforwardtomorechallengesinthefutureandbelievethatIwillcontinueto

growthroughthem.這次比賽不僅提高了我的英語技能,還讓我認(rèn)識(shí)到堅(jiān)持的力量。我期待未

來有更多的挑戰(zhàn),并相信自己會(huì)在這些挑戰(zhàn)中不斷成長。

(四)語言技巧運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯:

1.盡量使用一些高級(jí)的英語詞匯來替換常見的表達(dá),使文章更具文采。

例用“elated”代替"happy”,"arduous”代替"difficult“,“endeavor”代替"try”等。

2.使用復(fù)雜句式:適當(dāng)運(yùn)用定語從句、倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句等復(fù)雜句式,提升文章的語言水平。

ItwasthroughthiscompetitionthatItrulyunderstoodtheimportanceofhardwork.

通過這次比賽,我才真正理解了努力的重要性。

NotonlydidIimprovemyEnglishwritingskills,butIalsolearnedhowtothinkcritically.

我不僅提高了英語寫作技能,還學(xué)會(huì)了如何批判性地思考。

3.運(yùn)用修辭手法:使用比喻、擬人、排比等修辭手法,使文章更加生動(dòng)形象,富有感染力。

MyheartwaslikearacinghorsewhenIheardmynamecalledasthewinner.

當(dāng)我聽到自己的名字被宣布為獲勝者時(shí),我的心像一匹奔跑的馬一樣狂跳。

(五)邏輯連貫

1.連接詞:使用“however""moreover""therefore""meanwhile”等連接詞,使文章的段落之間

和句子之間的邏輯關(guān)系更加清晰。

Ifacedmanydifficultiesduringthecompetition.However,1didn'tgiveupandtriedmybestto

overcomethem.我在比賽中遇到了很多困難。然而,我沒有放棄,而是盡力去克服它們。

2.過渡句:在段落之間使用過渡句,起到承上啟下的作用,使文章的結(jié)構(gòu)更加緊密。

Aftertheintensecompetition,Inotonlyachievedgoodresultsbutalsogainedalotofvaluable

experience.Now,letmesharewithyouwhatIhavelearnedfromthisexperience.

在緊張激烈的比賽之后,我不僅取得了好成績,還獲得了許多寶貴的經(jīng)驗(yàn)?,F(xiàn)在,讓我和你

分享一下我從這次經(jīng)歷中學(xué)到的東西。

3.首尾呼應(yīng):在結(jié)尾部分呼應(yīng)開頭的內(nèi)容,強(qiáng)化主題。比如,開頭提到對(duì)比賽的期待和緊張,

結(jié)尾可以再次提及這種心情的轉(zhuǎn)變,以及比賽對(duì)自己的意義,使文章的主題更加突出,結(jié)構(gòu)

更加完整。

withbatedbreath:屏住呼吸

anatmosphereofintensefocus高度專注的氛圍

ashiverofexcitement:一陣興奮的顫抖

asfluidaswater:如流水般流暢

hittingeveryhighnote:精準(zhǔn)唱出每個(gè)高音

aseamlessandcaptivatingspectacle:無縫且迷人的景象

losingtrackoftime:忘記時(shí)間

atouchofmagic:一絲魔幻

mouthsagape:張大嘴巴

2.吸睛亮句

(1)描述比賽氛圍與開場(chǎng)

Themomentthecurtainrose,ahushfellovertheaudience,theiranticipationpalpable.

幕布升起的那一刻,觀眾席一片寂靜,他們的期待顯而易見。

Withbatedbreath,thecontestantssteppedontothestage,readytoshowcasetheirtalents.

選手們屏住呼吸走上舞臺(tái),準(zhǔn)備展示他們的才華。

Thespotlightbeameddown,highlightingtheperformerandcreatinganatmosphereofintensefocus.

聚光燈灑下,照亮了表演者,營造出一種高度專注的氛圍。

(2)描述表演過程

Thedancersmovementswereasfluidaswater,captivatingtheonlookerswiththeirgrace.

舞者的動(dòng)作如流水般流暢,以其優(yōu)雅吸引著觀眾。

Thesingersvoicesoaredthroughtheair,hittingeveryhighnotewithprecisionandpower.

歌手的歌聲在空中飛揚(yáng),精準(zhǔn)而有力地唱出每個(gè)高音。

Astheperformanceprogressed,theenergyintheroomseemedtomultiply,electrifyingthe

atmosphere.隨著表演的推進(jìn),房間里的能量似乎在倍增,使氣氛熱烈起來。

Theactorsfacialexpressionsweresovividthattheycouldconveyathousandemotionswithout

utteringaword.演員的面部表情如此生動(dòng),無需言語就能傳達(dá)出千種情感。

(3)描述比賽結(jié)果與感受

Theapplauseeruptedlikethunderaftertheperformanceended,atestamenttoitssuccess.

表演結(jié)束后,掌聲如雷般響起,證明了它的成功。

Thecontestantsnerveswereonedge,buttheymanagedtomaintaintheircomposureanddelivera

remarkableshow.選手們神經(jīng)緊繃,但他們?cè)O(shè)法保持鎮(zhèn)定并呈現(xiàn)了一場(chǎng)精彩的表演。

Theaudiencewascompletelyimmersedintheperformance,losingtrackoftimeandsurroundings.

觀眾完全沉浸在表演中,忘記了時(shí)間和周圍的一切。

(4)描述比賽收獲與感悟

Throughthisexperience,helearnedthattruestrengthcomesfromwithin.

通過這次經(jīng)歷,他明白真正的力量來自內(nèi)心。

Thestorytaughtthemthatloveisnotaboutpossession,butaboutunderstandingandsupport.

這個(gè)故事讓他們明白,愛不是占有,而是理解和支持。

Inthefaceofadversity,theydiscoveredthepowerofunityandperseverance.

面對(duì)逆境,他們發(fā)現(xiàn)了團(tuán)結(jié)和堅(jiān)持的力量。

Thisadventureremindedthemthatthegreatesttreasuresinlifearenotmaterial,butthebondswe

sharewithothers.

這次冒險(xiǎn)提醒他們,生活中最寶貴的財(cái)富不是物質(zhì)的,而是我們與他人之間的紐帶。

五、模擬演練

Writing01

(2024?河南?一模)

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

InahousefarfromthecitylivedJohnandhismother.John'sonlyhobbywaswanderinginthe

nearbypicturesqueforest.Initscenterwasashinyclearlakewithschoolsoffishdancinginit.

Fascinatedbythebeautyandlivelinessofnature,hedesiredtobecomeagreatartistandpresentall

thebreathtakingscenestotheworld.

Johnstudiedinthelocalprimaryschool.LifewasnoteasyforJohnandhismomafterhis

fatherdied.Knowingwhathardworkhismotherdidtomakeendsmeet,John,reallydidn'twant

hismothertoworry.Hismotherknewthesignificanceofeducationinlifebutshewasagainsthis

dreamofbecominganartist."Theprofessionofartistcan'taidapersoninmeetinghisdaily

expenses,9,shewouldsay.Butaseachdaypassed,John'sdream:becamemorepassionate.

Duetothelivingcircumstances,evenbuyingsomenewcolorswouldbealuxury.Johnonly

usedtheworndrawingfileandlimitedcolorsforhisdailypractice.Henevergaveupdrawing.He

spentasignificantamountoftimestayingin-theforest,secretlyperfectinghiscraft.With

continuoushardworkandadistinctgiftforart,hedrewbeautifully.

OnedayJohnreadaboutacompetitionbeingheldinthetown,whosedeadlinewasonlytwo

daysaway.Hegottheperfectopportunitytofulfillhisdesirebuthewasinadilemmaasforthe

competitionheneededspecialpaintsandsomebrushes.Hedidn'thavethecouragetoaskhismother

formoneyasheknewherprejudiceagainstart.

Thateveninghismomreturnedfromworkandhandedhimafewpapernotes,saying,“Thisis

foryourlunchatschoolnextfourdays.^^Heworkedupthecouragehopingtoaskhismotherifshe

couldgivehimsomemoremoneysothathecouldparticipateinthecompetition,butfinally,

consideringthefamily'sfinancialdifficulties,heswallowedthewords.

注意:

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Lookingatthenotesonthedeskthenextday,Johnwaslostinthought.

AttheawardceremonyJohnwasabouttospeakwhenhesawhismother.

【范文】

Lookingatthenotesonthedeskthenextday,Johnwaslostinthought."ShouldIusethe

moneyforthecompetition”,heaskedhimself,balancinghispassionforpaintingagainsthislunches

tobelost.Loveforartbeatingtheother,heboughtpaintsandbrusheswithsomeofthenotes,and

dashedtosignupforit,afterwhichheputhisheartandsoulintofinishingpainting.Afterhanding

itin,hewenthome,hisdancingheartreadytojumpfromhisbody.Weekslater,tohisgreatsurprise,

acallcameannouncingthathehadwonthefirstplaceandhewasinvitedtogiveaspeechatthe

awardceremony.

AttheawardceremonyJohnwasabouttospeakwhenhesawhismother.Wildexcitement

tookholdofhim,buthecalmeddownandbeganhisspeech,inwhichheexpressedappreciationfor

thegoldenopportunitytoshowhisloveforpaintingandsharethejoy.Afterashortpause,hesaid

emotionally,64Aboveall,Ishouldbegratefultothegreatestwomaninmymind-mybeloved

mother.Comeonstage,dearThenhismotherwentforward,withthunderousapplauseand

cheersalmostshootingthroughtheroof.Excitedtearsstreamingdownhercheeks,shehuggedher

sontightly,sayingshehadknownallandwouldsupporthispassionwithallenergyandstrength.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開,講述了John喜歡畫畫,但是家里很窮,無法支持他追求

這個(gè)夢(mèng)想。雖然母親不支持他畫畫,但是他還是想盡辦法堅(jiān)持。有一天,他得知鎮(zhèn)上正在舉

行繪畫比賽,他很高興,但是卻沒有錢買繪畫用品。恰好這天媽媽給了他接下來四天的午餐

費(fèi)。

【詳解】L段落續(xù)寫:

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“第二天,John看著桌上的鈔票,陷入了沉思”可知,第一段可描寫

John拿午餐錢買了顏料和畫筆去參加比賽,獲得了一等獎(jiǎng),被邀參加頒獎(jiǎng)典禮。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在頒獎(jiǎng)典禮上,John正要發(fā)言,這時(shí)他看見了他的母親”可知,第

二段可描寫John發(fā)表獲獎(jiǎng)感言,表達(dá)對(duì)母親的感謝,以及母親的反應(yīng)。

2.續(xù)寫線索:沉思——買東西并參賽——得知獲獎(jiǎng)——頒獎(jiǎng)典禮——發(fā)表演講并感謝

母親——母親的反應(yīng)

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①?zèng)_:dash/rush/race

②完成:finish/complete

③發(fā)表演講:giveaspeech/deliveraspeech

④擁抱:hug/embrace

情緒類

①驚訝:surprise/astonishment

②激動(dòng):excitement/thrill

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Loveforartbeatingtheother,heboughtpaintsandbrusheswithsomeof

thenotes,anddashedtosignupforit,afterwhichheputhisheartandsoulintofinishingpainting.

(獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語、由“介詞+關(guān)系代詞”引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句)

[高分句型2]Weekslater,tohisgreatsuiprise,acallcameannouncingthathehadwonthefirst

placeandhewasinvitedtogiveaspeechattheawardceremony.(由連接詞that弓|導(dǎo)賓語從句)

[高分句型3]Excitedtearsstreamingdownhercheeks,shehuggedhersontightly,sayingshehad

knownallandwouldsupporthispassionwithallenergyandstrength.(獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)作狀語、現(xiàn)

在分詞短語saying…作狀語)

Writing02

(2024?湖南永州?一模)

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Mydadbelievedinresponsibility!Independence!Newexperiences!Heoftenusedhis

fascinatingstoriesofhisyouthtourgeuschildrentofreshachievements.

OnedayhecamehomefromworkearlyandsawmewatchingalocalTVshow-TalentSprouts,

adailycontestforkidsfourteenandunder.Fourperformancesfilledthehalfhourfrom5:00to

5:30.Youmightwatchanythingfromaviolinsolotoamagicshow.Attheendtheperformerswere

spotlighted,andKMTV?sjudgesnamedawinner.

Itdidn'ttakeDaddylongtolookmeintheeye."YoushouldgoonTalentSprouts.Youcan

play4AveMaria.9Thinkofit-anunforgettableexperiencetobeonTVasaneleven-year-

old!^^BeforeIargued,hehadbeenalreadyoffonhisstoryofthehilarious(滑稽的)gloryofhis

performance.Thus,thoughIdidn'twantto,Iagreed.Actually,IdidknowSchubert's"AveMaria”

averyeasyversionthatusedtwohandstosimplifythosefamousarpeggios(琶音).Ididhaveit

memorized.

Thenextmorning,Imailedmyapplicationwiththerequiredinformation.Ihadalmost

forgottenaboutitwhenthenoticecameforanauditiontimeonaSaturdayafternoon.Daddysaid

partofbeingindependentandresponsiblewastogobymyself.ThebuswentrightbytheKMTV

studios.

SothatSaturdayIcheckedinatthedeskandsatdowntowait.Iwassooncalled.Thehostof

TalentSprouts,LewJeffrey,andthemusicaldirector,WarrenRudddescribedtheroutineforthe

participantsandtoldmeIcouldbegintoplaymypianopiece.

Intotheeighthmeasure(小節(jié))InoticedWarrenRuddnodtoLewJeffrey.Thatgaveme

confidence,andIrelaxed.DaddywasoverthemoonwhenItoldhimIhadbeenassignedadayto

performlessthantwoweeksaway.Still,Ihadverylittleconfidenceinmytalent.IknewIhadan

easyarrangement.IcouldneverhaveplayedSchubert'soriginal.

注意:

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:

WhenmyMondaycame,IagaintookthebustoKMTValoneandwaited.

Paragraph2:

SomehowmybrainwenttoworkandIcontinuedplaying.

【范文】Para1:

WhenmyMondaycame,IagaintookthebustoKMTValoneandwaited.Everythingwas

familiarthistime.Buthearingthemusicalsoundsandapplausefromtimetotime,Ifeltmyheart

waspoundingwithexcitementandnervousness.Eventually,itwasmyturn.Takingadeepbreath,

Icalmeddown.Confident,Iwenttothepianoandbegantoplay.Easy,soeasy!Funalmost...right

uptothecodaattheend.IsuddenlyrealizedIshouldnotbeattheend!Myheartjumpedtomy

mouth.Ihadskippedapart.Ahugepart.Howdidthathappen?

Para2:

SomehowmybrainwenttoworkandIcontinuedplaying.Itriedtosmileatthecameraand

playedtherestsmoothlyasifnoskippinghadhappened.Afterwhatseemedaneternity,Istopped

playing.However,itturnedoutthatmyperformancehadprobablylastedbarelyaminute.Surely

theresultwasasexpected-Iwasn'tthewinner.Onmywayhome,Isurprisedmyselfbyfeelingmore

relievedthandisappointed.Icouldnotpretendthatmyperformancewasbest.Intruth,theother

threewerefarsuperior.WhenIcamebackhometotalkabout"TheBigSkip”,Dadsmiled,64Itmay

nothavebeennoticedbysomeonewhodoesn'tknowSchubert5s'AveMaria.5Yourmovementwas

smooth.Youdidn'tfallapart.Allinall,aworthwhileexperience.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開,這篇文章講述了作者的父親鼓勵(lì)作者參加一個(gè)電視節(jié)目比

賽。作者雖然沒有信心,但還是同意了父親的建議,并通過自己獨(dú)自前往比賽的方式展示了

獨(dú)立和責(zé)任。在比賽中,作者忘記了一部分演奏內(nèi)容,但仍然以自信的態(tài)度完成了演出。盡

管沒有得獎(jiǎng),但作者感到釋然,父親也鼓勵(lì)她說這是一次有價(jià)值的經(jīng)歷。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫:

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)星期一到來的時(shí)候,我又獨(dú)自坐公交車去KMTV并且等待比

賽?!笨芍?,第一段可描寫作者等待過程中的心理以及商場(chǎng)比賽中發(fā)現(xiàn)自己忘記了一部分演

奏內(nèi)容的事實(shí)以及反應(yīng)。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“不知怎么的,我的大腦開始工作了,我繼續(xù)演奏?!笨芍?,第二段

可描寫作者在表演現(xiàn)場(chǎng)中解決問題的方法以及得知比賽結(jié)果的反應(yīng),和父親的安慰,同時(shí)也

要描述作者的最終感悟。

2.續(xù)寫線索:參加比賽——情緒緊張和激動(dòng)——忘記一部分的演奏內(nèi)容——堅(jiān)持并完成

表演一得知比賽結(jié)果一父親安慰一最終感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①走向鋼琴:gotothepiano/walktothepiano

②.錯(cuò)過一部分:skipapart/missapart

③.回到家:comebackhome/returnhome

情緒類

①.激動(dòng)和緊張:withexcitementandnervousness/excitedlyandnervously

②.感到寬慰:feelrelieved/feelasenseofrelief

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].Buthearingthemusicalsoundsandapplausefromtimetotime,Ifeltmy

heartwaspoundingwithexcitementandnervousness.(由現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語,以及介詞短語對(duì)情

緒的描寫)

[高分句型2].However,itturnedoutthatmyperformancehadprobablylastedbarelyaminute.(it

為形式主語,that引導(dǎo)主語從句作真正的主語)

Writing03

(2024?遼寧盤錦?一模)

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Thomas,askinnyyoungboy,lovedfootballwithallhisheart.Practiceafterpractice,heeagerly

gaveeverythinghehad.Butbeinghalfthesizeoftheotherboys,hegotabsolutelynowhere.Atall

thegames,thishopefulathletesatonthebench(板凳)andhardlyeverplayed.

Thisteenagerlivedalonewithhisfather,andtherelationshipbetweenthetwoofthemwas

veryspecial.Eventhoughthesonwasalwaysonthebench,hisfatherwasalwaysinthestands

cheering.Henevermissedagame.

Thisyoungmanwasstillthesmallestoftheclasswhenheenteredhighschool.Buthisfather

continuedtoencouragehim.Allthroughhighschoolhenevermissedapracticenoragamebut

remainedabenchwarmer.Besides,hisfaithfulfatherwasalwaysinthestands,alwayswithwordof

encouragementforhim.Theyoungmanlovedfootballandwasdeterminedtohanginthere,and

perhapshe'dgettoplaywhenhebecameasenior.

Itwasattheendofhisseniorfootballseasonandasherantothepracticefieldshortlybefore

thebigplayoff(奪標(biāo)決賽)thatthecoachmethimwithatelegram(電報(bào)).Theyoungmanreadthe

telegramandhebecamedeathlysilent:Bitinghislip,hebreathed,ctMyfatherdiedthismorning.Is

itallrightifImisspracticetoday?^^Thecoachputhisarmgentlyaroundhisshoulderandsaid,

“Taketherestoftheweekoff,son.Anddon'tevenplantocomebacktothegameonSaturday.^^

Saturdayarrived,andthegamewasnotgoingwell.Inthesecondhalfwhentheteamwastwo

scoresbehind,asilentyoungmanquietlyslippedintotheemptylockerroomandputonhisfootball

wear.Asheranontothesidelines,thecoachandhisplayersweresurprisedtoseetheirfaithful

teammatebacksosoon.

注意:

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

“Coach,pleaseletmeplay.Fvejustgottoplaytoday,9,saidtheyoungman.

Thislittleunknown,whohadneverplayedbefore,wasdoingeverythingright.

【范文】"Coach,pleaseletmeplay.I'vejustgottoplaytoday,9,saidtheyoungman.Heheldout

thetelegram,tearsglisteninginhiseyes.Thecoachtookthetelegramandreaditsilently,his

expressionsofteningwithunderstanding.Henoddedslowly,realizingthesignificanceofthis

momentfortheyoungman."Yougooutthereandplayyourheartout,son,^^thecoachreplied,

placingareassuringhandontheyoungman'sshoulder.6tYourfatherwould'vewantedthat."With

adeterminednod,theyoungmanwipedawayhistearsandheadedontothefield,readytohonor

hisfather^memoryinthebestwayheknewhow.

Thislittleunknown,whohadneverplayedbefore,wasdoingeverythingright.Asthegame

progressed,theyoungmanseemedtobeeverywhereatonce,chasingdownopponents,making

crucialtackles,andeveninterceptingapass.Histeammateswatchedinaweashetransformedinto

apowerhouseonthefield,hisfather5sspiritseeminglyguidingeverymovehemade.Witheach

play,hehonorednotjusthisfather^memory,butalsohisownunwaveringdeterminationtonever

giveup.

【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開,講述了一個(gè)叫Thomas的瘦小男孩,他熱愛足球,但由于

體型瘦小,總是坐在替補(bǔ)板凳上,但他的父親一直支持著他。在高中畢業(yè)的賽季結(jié)束前,他

接到了父親去世的消息。但最終他決定一定要返回賽場(chǎng),為了父親和自己,揮灑全力。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫:

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“'教練,請(qǐng)讓我上場(chǎng)吧。我今天一定要玩,‘年輕人說?!笨芍?/p>

一段可描寫Thomas成功說服教練,得到上場(chǎng)的機(jī)會(huì)。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“”可知,第二段可描寫Thomas帶著對(duì)父親的記憶,在球場(chǎng)上成為

最強(qiáng)者。

2.續(xù)寫線索:出示電報(bào)請(qǐng)求上場(chǎng)——得到許可走向球場(chǎng)——表現(xiàn)亮眼得到認(rèn)可——紀(jì)念

父親

3.詞匯激活:

行為類

①閃爍:glisten/glitter

②回答:reply/answer/respond

③走向球場(chǎng):headontothefield/walkontothefield

情緒類

①默默地:silently/insilence

②堅(jiān)定不移的:unwavering/unalterable

【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]Henoddedslowly,realizingthesignificanceofthismomentfortheyoung

man.(運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞短語作伴隨狀語)

[高分句型2]Thislittleunknown,whohadneverplayedbefore,wasdoingeverythingright.(運(yùn)用

了關(guān)系代詞who引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句)

[高分句型3]Asthegameprogressed,theyoungmanseemedtobeeverywhereatonce,chasing

downopponents,makingcrucialtackles,andeveninterceptingapass.(運(yùn)用了從屬連詞as弓|導(dǎo)時(shí)

間狀語從句和現(xiàn)在分詞短語作伴隨狀語)

Writing04

(2024?山西?二模)

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

“Lateagain,Mavis!HowmanytimeshaveItoldyoutocomebackintimetohelpmecook

dinner?^^askedMrs.Muntari.

“But,Mummy,Ican9tjustwalkoutinthemiddleofagame!^^protestedMavis,stillpanting

(喘氣)afterrunningallthewayhome.

“Youshouldn'tbeplayingthegameinthefirstplace,"Mrs.Muntaristoppedcookingand

lookedatMavis.

“But,Mum,Iwanttoplayfootball.Whycan'tI?YounevertellAdibeorSenzonottoplay

football.Ihadtoleavethegameathalftimeandrushbacksoyouwouldn'tgetangrywithme,“

saidMavis.

“Theyareboysandyou'renot!Itisassimpleasthat.Boysandgirlshavedifferentrolesto

play.Ihave11hungrymouthstofeedandIneedyourhelp!^^Mrs.Muntaritastedtheporridgeand

addedsomemorewater."You'retheoldestgirlnotworking,soitisyourjobtohelpmearoundthe

home.Thatisthewayofourpeople.Nowgoandfrysomemorechicken.Kuluhadtohelpmesince

youwerenothere.Sheburntherfingerandwasstillcrying.Ievenhadtoaskyourcousinfromnext

doortocomeandhelpme.^^

Atthedinnertable,AdibeandSenzowereexcitedlytalkingabouttoday'sgame,whileeating

thechickenthatMavishadfried.TheybothagreedthatMavisscoredinthefirsthalfwithapower

shotfromhalfwayline.Itwasagreatgoalastheirteamwaslosing1-0atthattime.

Dadcamehomethenandtoldtheboysthathesawnewsinthelocalpaperaboutfootballscouts

(球探)fromEnglandvisitingGhana.Thesescoutshadaskedtobeallowedtovisitvariousschools

tolookforplayersofthefuture.AdibeandSenzolookedateachotherandcheered,9,Wow,I'm

goingtobelikeEssien!andstartedarguingwhichonewouldmakeitasasuperstar.

注意:

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:Mavis?seyeslitupwithexcitement.

Paragraph2:Everythingseemedtochangeafterherparentswitnessedherperformanceinthefield.

【范文】Mavis'seyeslitupwithexcitement.MumnoticedthisandrequiredMavistogo

intothekitchenwithhertobringmoreporridge.Mavisspoketomumsincerely,^Yousee?Iscored

inthegame!Please,pleaseletmehaveatry!44'Tvetoldyoufootballisnotagameforgirls,"Mum

staredather.Hearingthis,shekeptbegginghermother,whoeventuallyagreedtowatchherplayin

personwithDad.

Everythingseemedtochangeafterherparentswitnessedherperformanceinthefield.Bothof

themthoughtDavishadatalentforfootball.Oneday,whencompetinginthecourt,Davis's

performanceleftadeepimpressiononascoutnamedJason,whoinvitedhertohisfootballteam.

Dayinanddayout,Davisbecameevenmoreskilledatfootballandwasadmittedintoakey

universitywithafullscholarship.Fouryearslater,shebroughtoutthebestinherselfinthefield

andearnedmanytitlesaswell.

【導(dǎo)語】

本文以人物為線索展開,講述了女孩梅維絲喜歡足球,并且踢得很棒,但是家人認(rèn)為女

孩應(yīng)該在家里幫著做家務(wù),看著其它男孩子們盡情踢足球,梅維絲想要抓住英國足球球探訪

問加納的機(jī)會(huì),說服父母去踢足球的故事。

【詳解】

1.段落續(xù)寫:由第一段首句內(nèi)容“梅維斯興奮得兩眼放光?!笨芍?,第一段可描寫梅維絲

尋找機(jī)會(huì)去學(xué)校見球探的經(jīng)過。

由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在她的父母看到她在球場(chǎng)上的表現(xiàn)后,一切似乎都改變了。”可知,

第二段可描寫父母同意梅維絲踢足球,后來進(jìn)入球隊(duì),取得很好的成就。

2.續(xù)寫線索:想盡辦法參加比賽——參加比賽——努力踢球一獲得贊揚(yáng)——給教練留

下印象一進(jìn)入足球隊(duì)一在足球領(lǐng)域很成功

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①進(jìn)入:gointo/enter/passinto

②請(qǐng)求:beg/request

③見證:witness/see

情緒類

①激動(dòng)地:withexcitement/excitedly/withemotion

②真誠地:sincerely/truly/genuinely

【點(diǎn)睛】

[高分句型1].Hearingthis,shekeptbegginghermother,whoeventuallyagreedtowatchherplay

inpersonwithDad.(使用了who引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句和現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)

[高分句型2].Oneday,whencompetinginthecourt,Davis?sperformanceleftadeep

impressiononascoutnamedJason,whoinvitedhertohisfootballteam.(使用了狀語從句的省略

和who引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句)

Writing05

(2024?浙江?二模)

閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

EveryOctober,myneighborhoodhasaHalloweencostumecontest.AndeveryOctober,my

neighborOllieandIracetotheannouncementboardintheparktofindoutthetheme.Oneyear,the

themewas"Dressupasyourfavoritebookcharacter.Anotheryear,itwas"Besomethingscary.^^

Butthisyear,thethemewaskindof,well,themeless.

“Becreative?^^Isaid,readingtheannouncementboard.tcThafsnotreallyatheme,isit?”

Olliehoppedoffhisskateboardstogetacloserlook."You'reright,“heagreed.thinkmy

favoritethemeeverwas4Superheroes\IlovedmySuper-ForceFlyingEaglescostumesomuch,I

keptthatthinghanginginmyclosetforyears!,?

“Myfavoritethemewas'FarmAnimals'."Igiggled."'Rememberhowyouinsistedonbeinga

Stegosaurus(劍龍)?”

“WhenIwasfive,dinosaursweremyworld.^^Ollielaughed.ctIwouldhavelovedtoseea

Stegosaurusoutgrazingwiththecows.”

“Nowthafsthecreativespiritweneedfbrthischallenge!"Isaid.t6Maybe,sincewedon't

knowexactlywhatwewanttobeyet,weshouldstartbychoosingsomecoolcostume-making

materials.

'Tvegotit!”O(jiān)lliesaid,scoopingupabunchoffallenleaves.

“Really?”Isaid."You'regoingtomakeanentirecostumeoutofleaves?"

“Whynot?^^hesaid,scoopingupsomemore.

“They'retotallyfree,andIcanguarantee,noonewillbeatreeasgreatasme.^^

“Don'tyoumean,atreeasgreataswe?”Igrinned.

“Um,first,thatgrammardoesn'tsoundright,“saidOllie."Andsecond,noway!Thinkofyour

owncreativeideas.”

“Aw,comeon,“Isaid.t6YoushouldbeflatteredthatIlikeyourideasomuch.Plus,Ijust

thoughtoftheperfectwaytomakebranches.9,

Finally,OlliesaidOK.

注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2,請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:Weendedupfillingtwojumbobagswithdifferentkindsofleaves.

Paragraph2:Thenthebigmomentcame.

【范文】

Weendedupfillingtwojumbobagswithdifferentkindsofleaves.Oak,maple,andsycamore

leavescrunchedunderourfeetaswecollectedthemfromthepark.Olliewasright:therewas

somethingthrillingabouttheideaofcreatingacostumeoutofnature'sownsupplies.Aswewalked

backtoOllie'shouse,ourbagsrustlingwitheachstep.Icouldn'thelpbutfeelasurgeofexcitement

fortheupcomingcontest.Thiswasgoingtobethemostunconventionalcostumewe'devermade.

Thenthebigmomentcame.Onthenightofthecontest,theparkwastransformedintoa

colorfulspectacleofcreativity.Aswearrived,wesawpirates,princesses,andevenagiantjellyfish

madeentirelyofballoons.Amidstthecrowd,OllieandIstoodproudlyinourleafyattire.Whenit

wasourturntopresentourcostume,weconfidentlystruttedontothemakeshiftstage.Toour

surprise,thecrowderuptedintoapplause.Ourinnovativechoicepaidoff.Aswewalkedhomethat

night,adornedinourmakeshifttreecostumes,wecouldn'tstopsmiling.Sometimes,thebestthemes

aretheonesyoucreateyourself.

【導(dǎo)語】本篇書面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫。本文以人物為線索展開。每年十月,作者的鄰居奧利都

會(huì)舉辦萬圣節(jié)服裝比賽。今年的主題是創(chuàng)造力。奧利今年要用樹葉做一套服裝,非常有創(chuàng)意,

作者也很喜歡奧利的想法。

【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫

①由第一段句首內(nèi)容“我們最后在兩個(gè)大袋子里裝滿了不同種類的葉子?!笨芍谝欢?/p>

可以描寫二人裝滿葉子后的動(dòng)作和感受。

②由第二段句首內(nèi)容“然后重大時(shí)刻到來了?!笨芍?,第二段可以描寫大家看到二人的服

裝后人們的反應(yīng)和二人的感受。

2.續(xù)寫線索:裝滿樹葉——回奧利家——重要時(shí)刻來——展示服裝——掌聲—回家一

—感悟

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①收集:collect/gather

②倉造:create/produce

③改變:transform/change

情緒類

①令人興

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