遇險脫困類讀后續(xù)寫 解析版

遇困脫險類讀后續(xù)寫講義（考情+語料+金句+真題+模擬）解析版【讀后續(xù)寫遇困脫險類話題深度解讀】【遇困脫險話題解讀】遇困脫險是讀后續(xù)寫中常見話題，涉及人與自然或者人與社會主題語境,會有火災(zāi)、洪水、溺水、迷路、交通事故、突發(fā)疾病等緊急情況。從最初遇險的驚慌害怕,絕望無助,到想辦法救援,到最后獲救的寬慰和感激,涉及到一系列的表達(dá)。情節(jié)線：遭遇危險（惡劣環(huán)境/危險描寫&情感描寫）→出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)（想到辦法&呼救求助）→救援脫險（救援描述&情感描寫）→感悟升華（歷險者/救援者）。情感線：焦急緊張/恐懼無助→筋疲力盡→欣喜/欣慰（relieved）→感動/感謝/感悟。【讀后續(xù)寫六個寫作步驟】第一步：提煉六個要素,獲取主旨大意讀后續(xù)寫的閱讀文本基本上都是記敘文,所以要提煉出六個基本要素：who,where,when,what,why和how?？忌陂喿x文本過程中只有把握好這六個要素,才能總結(jié)出文章大意和故事情節(jié),進(jìn)而推斷出作者的寫作意圖,輕松獲取故事的主旨大意。第二步：理清故事脈絡(luò),把握情感變化線索是敘事性作品中貫穿整個故事的脈絡(luò),所有的情節(jié)均圍繞文本主要線索展開。記敘文一般有兩條故事發(fā)展線索：情節(jié)(plots)線索和情感(emotions)線索?？忌梢岳脠D表法或思維導(dǎo)圖法理清故事的發(fā)展脈絡(luò),把握作者的情感變化。這樣,考生在續(xù)寫時才可以更好地遵循原文的思路、風(fēng)格和語言。第三步：分析段落首句,精心設(shè)計問題分析續(xù)寫后所給的兩個段首句對提高所寫內(nèi)容和原文的融洽度至關(guān)重要?？忌梢韵确治鲆幌滤o的兩個段首句之間的邏輯關(guān)系是順承關(guān)系、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系還是因果關(guān)系等。然后,根據(jù)自己的判斷設(shè)計小問題：根據(jù)段首句得知什么？續(xù)寫開始寫什么？接下來寫什么？續(xù)寫第一段的段尾如何銜接第二段的開頭？續(xù)寫第二段的段尾如何才能照應(yīng)故事的主旨大意？第四步：設(shè)計結(jié)尾情節(jié),拔高價值取向考生必須緊緊圍繞故事的發(fā)展脈絡(luò),展開合理的想象,巧妙地設(shè)計所續(xù)寫的兩段的故事結(jié)尾情節(jié)。設(shè)計結(jié)尾情節(jié)時,考生可以借助前文的故事脈絡(luò)設(shè)計一些具體的問題。還要注意設(shè)計好續(xù)寫的第二段的結(jié)尾,讓結(jié)尾處的情感得到升華或拔高,把故事所折射出的人生觀、價值觀充分體現(xiàn)出來。第五步：列出關(guān)鍵詞匯,續(xù)寫連貫句群設(shè)計好要續(xù)寫的兩段的情節(jié)后,考生可以先在草稿紙上把原文出現(xiàn)的主要人物、發(fā)生的主要事件和描寫人物或事件的情感詞羅列出來,并按事件的發(fā)生順序逐一理清。最后,考生用這些關(guān)鍵詞匯重構(gòu)句子,寫出連貫一致的句群。第六步：升格低級詞句，謄寫完善成文考生在寫好兩段的內(nèi)容后,可以根據(jù)語法知識把一些低級的詞匯或句式進(jìn)行潤色升格。升格低級詞句的目的是讓續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容更加符合原文的語言風(fēng)格,與原文在銜接上更加融洽。完成這一步后,考生要迅速把寫好的兩段英文以清晰、規(guī)范、美觀、流暢的書寫謄寫在答題紙上?！居隼撾U話題金句分類背默】一、惡劣環(huán)境描寫1.Theheavyrainwasviolentlybeatingagainstthewindow.1.大雨瘋狂地?fù)舸虼皯簟?.Darkcloudscoveredthesky,andthenitstartedtorainheavily.2.烏云籠罩著天空,隨之而來的是傾盆大雨。3.Thecomfortingforestsoundsquicklyturnedintoaterrifyingsymphonyofthunderandwind.3.令人欣慰的森林之聲很快就變成了雷鳴和狂風(fēng)的恐怖交響樂。4.Thebigwindroaredthroughourears,andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.4.大風(fēng)從耳邊呼嘯而過，我們被推離海岸越來越遠(yuǎn)。5.Withrainpouringdownandtheriverswelling,theyrowedagainstthecurrent,theirwillasstrongassteel.5.大雨傾盆,河水上漲,他們逆水行舟,意志堅不可摧。二、被困心理描寫1.Fingersnumbedbythechillywater,throatchokedbyicywind,lfeltonthevergeofcollapsing.1.手指被冰冷的海水弄得麻木,喉嚨被寒風(fēng)吹得哽咽,我感到快要崩潰了。2.Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot,variousterriblethoughtsfloodingin.2.嚇得僵住了,他站在那里一動不動,各種可怕的想法向他涌來。3.Havingsufferedsomuch,Tomcouldn’tcontainhisemotionsandtearsofgratitudetrickleddownhischeeks.3.受了這么多苦,湯姆再也不能抑制自己的情緒,感激的淚水滾下他的臉頰。4.Nervousandanxious,NorwoodstruggledtocalmherselfdownandcarriedoutfirstaidtoSimmons.4.諾伍德既緊張又焦慮,努力讓自己鎮(zhèn)定下來,對西蒙斯實施急救。5.Astimetickedby,fearcreptuponmyheartandlcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldstand.5.隨著時間的流逝,恐懼爬上了我的心,我?guī)缀醪恢牢疫€能堅持多久。三、救援行動描寫1.Tomydelight,wemanagedtodigoutthetrenchandtookthesehorsesdownthemountainwiththehelpofothers.1.令我欣喜的是,在大家的幫助下,我們成功挖好了溝槽,馬兒被帶到山下。2.Withdesperatetears,shesuddenlyspottedaboatwithafigurewalkingonit.Shewavedandcriedforhelpwithallherstrength.2.帶著絕望的淚水,她突然看到一條船,上面有一個人在走動。她揮揮手,用盡全身力氣喊救命。3.Eyesfixedonthebeast,hepulledoutthesausagesinhisbackpack,aimedatthefurrygiantandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal,hopingtheflavorwouldattractit.3.他盯著這個野獸,從包里掏出香腸,瞄準(zhǔn)毛乎乎的巨熊直接扔向這個兇獸,希望香味能夠吸引它的注意力。4.Thewolfjumpedup,andrushedtowardsoneofthem,butwasbeatenback.Seeingthathecouldn’twin,thewolfranawaydownthehill.4.狼跳了起來,沖向其中一只,但被擊退了。狼看到自己贏不了,就跑下山去了。5.Withtearsofappreciationrollingdownhischeeks,Petersaidthankfully,“youhavesavedmetoday.Icouldn’tthankyouenough.”5.感激的淚水順著臉頰流下,他感激地說：“今天你救了我,我對你感激不盡”。四、主題升華句1.Theaccidentenabledthemtocherisheverymomentandtreasuremeaningfulconnections.1.事故讓他們珍惜每一刻并重視有意義的人際關(guān)系。2.October20wassounforgettablethatitwouldstayinmymemoryforever.2.10月20日是如此難忘,它將永遠(yuǎn)留在我的記憶。3.Itoccurredtomethathelpingothersispricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.3.我突然意識到,幫助別人是無價的,每個人都應(yīng)該是一個救生員。4.Onesimpleactofkindnessisablessingforboththegiverandthereceiver.4.一個簡單的善舉是給予者和接受者的祝福。5.Shefeltwarmthinthecoldday,andbelievedtherewaskindnessineverycorner.5.她在寒冷的日子里感受到了溫暖,她相信世界充滿善意。6.IrealizedhowluckyIwastoberescuedandhowblessedIamtohavesuchsupportivefriends.6.我意識到能夠被營救、能夠有這樣支持我的朋友是多么幸運。7.IwillbealwayscarefulwhenIgooutdoors.Afterall,safetyalwayscomesfirst.7.以后外出時我會注意安全。畢竟安全總是第一位的。8.Thestoryshowsthateveryoneshouldhaveagoodknowledgeoffirstaid,foreverysecondwillcountinanemergency.8.這個故事表明,每個人都應(yīng)該學(xué)點急救知識,因為在緊急情況下每一秒都很重要。9.OnlythendidIrealizethatactionscancurefearandbraverycanconquerdifficulties.9.直到那時,我才意識到行動可以治愈恐懼,勇敢可以戰(zhàn)勝困難。10.Thispainfuladventureteachesmenottodespaireveninthedarkesthour,becauseaftereverynightthereisaday.10.這次痛苦的冒險教會了我即使在最黑暗的時刻也不要絕望,因為黑夜之后就是黎明。11.“Bepatient!Therescueteamisontheway.”thesewordsbroughtarayofhopetotheseeminglyhopelesssituation.11.“救援隊已經(jīng)在路上了?！边@句話給看似絕望的處境帶來了一線希望。12.Thisunforgettableexperienceforeverremindsmetocherishthosewhoshoweruswithboundlesslove.12.這段難忘的經(jīng)歷永遠(yuǎn)提醒我要珍惜那些給我們帶來無限愛的人。13.WhentheylearnedIwassafe,theywererelieved.Whatanunforgettableexperience!13.當(dāng)他們得知我很安全時,他們松了一口氣。多么難忘的經(jīng)歷??！14.Itwasthisuniqueexperiencethatmademeunderstandwhateverdifficultywearefacedwith,weshouldn'tloseheart.14.正是這種獨特的經(jīng)歷使我理解了無論我們面臨什么困難,我們都不應(yīng)失去信心?！居隼撾U故事情節(jié)構(gòu)建】階段情節(jié)發(fā)展情緒刻畫第一階段困難處境描寫—困難處境+消極情緒---困難處境：冰雪覆蓋、道路泥濘、氣溫降低……--情感表現(xiàn)：焦慮、緊張、恐懼、絕望、難過……第二階段救人過程呈現(xiàn)—想到辦法+如釋重負(fù)--救他型：發(fā)現(xiàn)困境—克服困難—提供幫助--他救型：遇到困境—尋求幫助—給與施救第三階段皆大歡喜結(jié)局—感激+感動+升華--問題解決：欣慰、開心、擁抱、感謝……--主旨升華：難忘記憶、傳遞快樂、團(tuán)結(jié)堅持……【遇困脫險優(yōu)秀片段欣賞】一、火災(zāi)救援動作鏈：察覺異常（聞到焦味/聽到巨響）→迅速確認(rèn)災(zāi)難源頭→尋找最近的逃生路徑→迅速逃離→找到安全位置她聞到一股刺鼻的焦味,立刻停下手中的活→四處查看,發(fā)現(xiàn)廚房已被火焰吞噬→她趕緊抓起手機(jī),沖向大門→一邊撥打119,一邊奔向街道→到達(dá)安全地帶后,她終于松了一口氣。Shesmelledasharp,acridburningodorandimmediatelystoppedwhatshewasdoing→Shelookedaroundanddiscoveredthatthekitchenwasengulfedinflames→Shequicklygrabbedherphoneandrushedtowardsthedoor→Whiledialing119,sheranoutontothestreet→Afterreachingasafespot,shefinallybreathedasighofrelief.二、地震救援動作鏈：聽到求救聲音→確定求救者位置→準(zhǔn)備救援工具→進(jìn)入救援現(xiàn)場→成功救出傷者→將傷者帶到安全區(qū)域他隱約聽到廢墟下傳來微弱的呼救聲→立即確定聲源→找到一根鐵桿作為撬杠→小心翼翼地挪開瓦礫→成功將受困者拉出→他背起受困者,迅速撤離到安全區(qū)域。Hevaguelyheardfaintcriesforhelpfrombeneaththerubble→Immediatelylocatedthesource→Foundametalrodtouseasalever→Carefullyliftedawaythedebris→Successfullypulledthetrappedpersonout→Hecarriedthepersontoasafearea.三、地震逃生動作鏈：察覺到災(zāi)難逼近→確定最佳逃生路徑→準(zhǔn)備逃生用品→按照計劃逃生→確保安全后停止行動他感到地面劇烈震動→馬上確定通往出口的最短路線→拿上背包中的急救包和水→沿著走廊迅速朝出口方向跑去→到達(dá)戶外空曠地后,他停下來,檢查自己是否受傷。Hefeltthegroundshakeviolently→Immediatelydeterminedtheshortestroutetotheexit→Grabbedthefirst-aidkitandwaterfromhisbackpack→Ranquicklydownthehallwaytowardstheexit→Afterreachingtheopenoutdoorarea,hestoppedtocheckifhewasinjured.四、落水救援動作鏈：意識到無法獨自脫險→尋找求救工具（電話/信號設(shè)備）→發(fā)送求救信號（撥打電話/發(fā)射信號）→等待救援→確認(rèn)救援抵達(dá)她意識到自己被困在水中，無法游到岸邊→她拼命尋找漂浮的木板→抓住木板,用隨身攜帶的手機(jī)撥打求救電話→等待救援時,她緊緊抓住木板→聽到遠(yuǎn)處傳來直升機(jī)的聲音,她的心情逐漸平靜下來。Sherealizedshewastrappedinthewaterandcouldn’tswimtoshore→Shedesperatelylookedforafloatingplank→Grabbingtheplank,sheusedherphonetocallforhelp→Whilewaitingforrescue,sheheldontotheplanktightly→Hearingthesoundofahelicopterinthedistance,heranxietystartedtofade.五、迷路救援動作鏈：發(fā)現(xiàn)不在預(yù)期位置→尋找可能的去向→詢問周圍的人→聯(lián)系家人和朋友→報警或求助→持續(xù)尋找她發(fā)現(xiàn)兒子不在臥室里→迅速檢查了整個房子→問了鄰居,沒人見過他→她拿起電話,急切地?fù)艽蚣胰撕团笥训奶柎a→最終報警,并請求幫助尋找→整晚她都在街上四處尋找。Shenoticedhersonwasn’tinhisbedroom→Quicklycheckedtheentirehouse→Askedtheneighbors,butnoonehadseenhim→Shegrabbedherphoneandurgentlycalledfamilyandfriends→Finallyreportedtothepoliceandaskedforhelp→Shespentthewholenightsearchingthestreets.六、迷路脫困動作鏈：初步線索失敗→重整計劃尋找→新的線索引導(dǎo)→途中遇到挫折或意外→最終找到目標(biāo)他先去常去的咖啡館找她,但沒找到→重新思考她可能去的地方→突然想到她提過的公園→在公園里找了半天,甚至跟一位陌生人發(fā)生了爭執(zhí)→終于在一個偏僻的長椅上發(fā)現(xiàn)了她，她正靜靜地坐著。Hefirstwenttotheusualcafétofindher,butshewasn’tthere→Reconsideredwhereshemighthavegone→Suddenlyrememberedshementionedapark→Searchedtheparkforalongtime,evengotintoanargumentwithastranger→Finallyfoundhersittingquietlyonasecludedbench.七、野生動物動作鏈：發(fā)現(xiàn)不尋常動靜→定睛觀察→確認(rèn)是野生動物→慢慢靠近→觀察動物的行為→保持安全距離他聽到草叢里有動靜→他停下腳步,仔細(xì)觀察→發(fā)現(xiàn)是一只小鹿在覓食→他放慢腳步,小心翼翼地靠近→觀察它的每一個動作,不想驚嚇到它→但始終保持一定的距離。Heheardrustlinginthebushes→Stoppedwalkingandobservedclosely→Sawitwasadeerforaging→Slowedhispaceandcautiouslyapproached→Watcheditseverymove,notwantingtostartleit→Butkeptasafedistanceatalltimes.八、野生動物救助動作鏈：發(fā)現(xiàn)動物受困→判斷如何解救→獲取工具或方法→接近動物→實施救援→檢查動物狀態(tài)他看到一只小狗被困在河邊的泥潭里→判斷必須用繩子才能把它拉出來→找到一根結(jié)實的樹枝和繩子→小心接近小狗,安撫它別害怕→將繩子套在小狗身上,慢慢拉上岸→小狗獲救后,他檢查了一下它的四肢,確保沒有受傷。Hesawapuppytrappedinamuddybankbytheriver→Realizedheneededaropetopullitout→Foundasturdybranchandsomerope→Carefullyapproachedthepuppy,calmingitdown→Loopedtheropearoundthepuppyandslowlypulledittosafety→Afterrescuingthepuppy,hecheckeditslegstomakesureitwasn’tinjured.【遇困脫險優(yōu)秀范文欣賞】一、飛機(jī)引擎故障墜海飛行員互幫互助得以營救【內(nèi)容梗概】本文以人物為線索展開,講述了兩名飛行員由于飛機(jī)引擎發(fā)生故障而墜海,他們在迫降時幸免于難,兩名飛行員在海上等待救援。在等待了幾個小時后,救援飛機(jī)到來,但是,沒有發(fā)現(xiàn)他們。夜幕降臨,救援難度增加,他們能在危險中互相幫助,永不放棄,最終得以營救的故事?！纠m(xù)寫范文】Afteralmost20hours,Uemoto’sbodyfinallyranoutofpower.ThenUemotoheardthesoundofthehelicopter.“It’scoming!”sheshouted.“Thisisit,Sydnie,”McMahonsaid.McMahonandUemotowavedtheirhandscrazily.Totheirdisappointment,thehelicopterflewoverheadandthenflewaway.Theyhadnochoicebuttohuginthewaterbecauseoftheirstrongdesiretosurvive.Alone,eitherofthemwouldhavedied.However,theybelievedthatiftheycouldhelpeachotherindangerandnevergiveup,theywouldmakeit.Eyesup,theywerelookingforwardtoseeinganotherhelicopter.Asecondhelicopter(直升機(jī))arrivedtenminuteslater.Seeingit,UemotoandMcMahonburstintotears,wavingtheirlifepreservers.Afterafewmoments,arescuerloweredhimselfintotheocean,followedbyametalrescuebasketthatwastiedtothehelicopter.TherescuerguidedUemotointothebasketand,withalift,sheroseintotheairandtowardthesafetyofthehelicopter.ThenitwasMcMahon’sturn.“Thisisastorywe’regoingtotellourchildrenandgrandchildren,”saidUemoto.【續(xù)寫譯文】將近20個小時后,上本的身體終于沒電了。然后上本聽到了直升機(jī)的聲音?！八鼇砹?！”她喊道?！熬褪沁@樣,西德尼,”麥克馬洪說。麥克馬洪和上本瘋狂地?fù)]手。令他們失望的是,直升機(jī)從頭頂飛過,然后飛走了。他們別無選擇,只能在水中擁抱,因為他們強(qiáng)烈的求生欲望。單獨一個人,他們中的任何一個都會死。然而,他們相信,如果他們能在危險中互相幫助,永不放棄,他們就會成功。抬起眼睛,他們期待著看到另一架直升機(jī)。十分鐘后,第二架直升機(jī)抵達(dá)?？吹剿?上本和麥克馬洪淚流滿面,揮舞著救生衣。片刻之后,一名救援人員將自己放入大海,隨后是綁在直升機(jī)上的金屬救援籃。救援人員將上本引導(dǎo)到籃子里,她舉起一把電梯,升到空中,朝直升機(jī)的安全方向走去。然后輪到麥克馬洪了?！斑@是一個我們要告訴我們的孩子和孫子的故事，”上本說。二、圣誕節(jié)家庭著火被爺爺營救,成為最好圣誕禮物【內(nèi)容梗概】本文以事件為線索展開,講述作者在圣誕節(jié)前夕和妹妹Shelly以及精神錯亂的祖父呆在家里,突然家里大廳著火,里面冒出煙霧和火焰。作者一家躲在嚴(yán)寒的戶外,想打電話911求救時才發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的手機(jī)沒有電,而祖父的手機(jī)在著火的屋里面?！纠m(xù)寫范文】Thoughoverwhelmedbyextremepanic,Idecidedtotakeachance.Thehousewasengulfedinanimmensestreamofflame,withroaringfirealmostswallowingme.FullyawareasIwasthatalongandtoughjourneywasahead,Iwasn’tdefeated.Rather,Istoopedandinchedforward.Afterwhatseemedlikeacentury,Ireachedthedestination,alive.Asthesmokethickened,Ifeltmythroatandlungsburning.Glancingaroundtheroom,Ilocatedthephoneandgrabbeditimmediately.BeforeIcouldcelebrate,ragingfirepreparedtochewmeup.Firesentmeintodespairbeforethefamiliarfigureofmygrandfathercameintomysight.Fearlessandswift,heshotthroughtheflames,behavinglikeanironman.Withunwaveringdetermination,heseizedmeandrushedout.Suddenly,housebeamscollapsed,strikinghimdown.Isummonedallmystrengthtolifthimtohisfeetandsupportedhimout.Finally,wemadeit.Afterthat,mygrandfathermurmuredunconsciously,“FireconsumedtheChristmasgiftforyou.”Ifeltalumpinmythroatandwhispered,“YouarethebestChristmasgift!”Thisunforgettableexperienceforeverremindsmetocherishthosewhoshoweruswithboundlesslove.【續(xù)寫譯文】盡管極度恐慌,我還是決定冒險一試。房子被一股巨大的火焰吞沒了,熊熊的火焰幾乎吞噬了我。盡管我完全意識到前方還有一段漫長而艱難的旅程,但我并沒有被打敗。相反,我彎下腰,慢慢向前走。似乎過了一個世紀(jì),我活著到達(dá)了目的地。隨著煙霧越來越濃,我感到喉嚨和肺部都在燃燒。我掃視了一下房間,找到了電話,立刻抓住了它。我還沒來得及慶祝,熊熊大火就準(zhǔn)備把我燒成灰燼。在我祖父熟悉的身影出現(xiàn)在我眼前之前,大火讓我絕望了。他無所畏懼,動作敏捷,像鋼鐵俠一樣在火焰中射擊。他堅定不移地抓住我,沖了出去。突然,房子的橫梁倒塌了,把他撞倒了。我用盡全力把他扶起來,把他扶了出來。終于,我們做到了。在那之后,爺爺不自覺地喃喃自語：“火吞噬了送給你的圣誕禮物?！蔽腋械胶韲颠煅?低聲說：“你是最好的圣誕禮物！”這段難忘的經(jīng)歷永遠(yuǎn)提醒我要珍惜那些給我們無限愛的人。【遇困脫險話題高考真題調(diào)研】【2020浙江6月卷】--營地危機(jī)：兇猛北極熊來襲,面包與直升機(jī)如何化險為夷熊返回營地--緊張害怕--面包攻擊--直升機(jī)趕到--快速登上飛機(jī)--熊把籬笆推到--拍下熊“打劫”的畫面閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”-thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears-likeallwildanimalsshouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后,請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.___________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.___________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp,thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.Itworked!Thebearstoppedtheattackandrantothebread.Butitwasn’tlongbeforeheeatupallthebreadandcamebackagain.Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.“Thankgoodnesswearesaved!”Ellicriedout.Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtothespotthatthebearhadfinallytoredownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.Iquicklytookoutthecameraandphotographedtherarescene:wewererobbedbyapolarbear.【分析】本文以事件為線索展開,講述了作者和妻子前往被稱為“北極熊之都”的加拿大丘吉爾鎮(zhèn)拍攝北極熊。夫妻二人做飯之時,一頭饑餓的雄性幼熊跟著面包的蒜香味,靠近了營地,猛烈撞擊營地邊上的鐵絲圍欄。作者和妻子使出渾身解數(shù),想嚇退這頭熊，不料它“不破籬笆誓不歸”。無奈之下,作者求助營地管理員,被告知救援直升機(jī)要30分鐘后才能趕到,只得先嘗試用胡椒噴霧噴灑北極熊的眼睛,不料這使熊變得更加暴躁,在千鈞一發(fā)之際直升機(jī)及時趕到,他們得救了的故事?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：由第一段首句內(nèi)容“幾分鐘后,熊返回了我們的營地。”可知,第一段可描寫作者夫妻二人如何再次對付熊及兩人在此過程中的緊張害怕。由第二段首句內(nèi)容“就在那時,直升機(jī)趕到了?！笨芍?第二段可描寫作者夫妻二人獲救時的心情。2.續(xù)寫線索：熊返回營地——緊張害怕——用面包攻擊——直升機(jī)趕到——快速登上飛機(jī)——熊把籬笆推到——拍下熊“打劫”的畫面3.詞匯激活行為類①激怒：anger/provoke/enrage②抓起：grab/snatchup③拿出：takeout/fetchout情緒類①瘋狂的：mad/crazy②興奮的：excited/thrilled【點睛】[高分句型1]thenwerealizedthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly.（for引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句）[高分句型2]Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.（現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）[高分句型3]Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.(once引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句和形容詞作狀語)【遇困脫險話題名校好題調(diào)研】【調(diào)研01】（2025·福建廈門·二模）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Thismorning,IaskedMomtotakemetothepool.ButsheremindedmeI’dwatchkidsforherasshegotajobinterviewattheradiostation.Still,Iasked,“Couldn’tJuliewatchtheminstead?”“Shecanhelp,Jess,butshe’sonlyten.I’llfeelbetterwithafifteen-year-oldincharge,honey.”Momgavemeahugandoffshewent.SothereIwas,stuckwatchingmyfive-year-oldsisterLyssaandthree-year-oldbrotherDougie.Iusuallydon’tmindwatchingthekids,buttheproblemwasourlittlerentedtrailerhouse(拖車房屋).It’slikelivinginabarbecuecookerinhotdays.Well,asissaid,“Whatis,is.”andIdecidedtomakethebestofit.WemovedoutintothefrontyardandIfilledapaddlingpoolforthekids.Inoticedthattheskylookedalittlestrange—greenish-yellow,withgraycloudsrisingformiles—butIdidn’tthinkanythingofit.Askidsjumpedinthepool,Isettleddowntoreadmymagazine.Iputonheadphonesandturnedthevolumeuploudenoughtoblockouttheirnoise.BeforelongIgotlostinacoolstory.IwasalmostattheendwhenJuliecameovertome,droppingwateronmyarticle.Itookmyheadphonesoff,“Hey,what’swrongwithyou?”Shepointedupwards.That’swhenIsawtheskyandaboutfelloffmychair.Notonlyhadthecloudsmovedtowardus,theywereswirling(打旋).Ihadn’trealizedhowmuchthewindhadpickedup.Ahuge,gray-blackfunnel(漏斗)snakeddownfromtheskytotheground—areal,livetornado!Anditheadedourwayatahighspeed!ThoughIhadlearnedabouttornadosafety,atthatmoment,theonlythingIcouldrememberwasthatatornadodevelopsfastandthattrailerhousesaretheworstplacetotakeshelter.Itriedhardtorememberothersafetytips.Getlow.Yeah.Ifyou’recaughtoutside,findthelowestspot.Scanningaround,myeyestoppedonalineofbushes.注意：(1)續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；(2)請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。Therewasaditch(溝渠)thereforshelter,ahundredyardsoff.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Butinacoupleofminutes,thetornadowasover.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Therewasaditch(溝渠)thereforshelter,ahundredyardsoff.Iquicklygatheredthekids,yelling,“Runtotheditch!Asfastasyoucan!”Thewindhowled,anddebrisfleweverywhere.JulieheldDougie’shandtightly,andIgrabbedLyssa.Weranwithallourmight.Theforceofthewindpushedagainstus,makingeachstepastruggle.Whenwereachedtheditch,wehuddledtogether.Icoveredthekidswithmybody,prayingthetornadowouldpass.Thenoisewasdeafening,likeathousandtrainsroaring.Icouldfeelthegroundshakingbeneathus.Butinacoupleofminutes,thetornadowasover.Thehowlingwindgraduallydieddown,andthedebrisstoppedflying.Islowlyliftedmyheadandlookedaround.Theworldseemedabitsurreal.Treeswereuprooted,andpartsofthetrailerwerescattered.Weclimbedoutoftheditch.Thekidswereshakenbutunhurt.Ifeltahugesenseofreliefwashoverme.Aswemadeourwaybacktothedamagedtrailer,Iknewwewereluckytobealive.AndIwasproudofusforhandlingtheterrifyingsituationsobravely.【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開,講述了作者在一個可能遭遇龍卷風(fēng)的日子里,負(fù)責(zé)照看年幼的弟弟妹妹,當(dāng)意識到龍卷風(fēng)即將來臨時,作者迅速采取行動,帶領(lǐng)弟弟妹妹們跑到附近的溝渠躲避,最終大家安全無恙的故事?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“那里有一條溝渠可以躲避,距離我們一百碼遠(yuǎn)?！币约暗诙问拙鋬?nèi)容“但幾分鐘后,龍卷風(fēng)過去了?！笨芍?第一段可描寫作者帶著弟弟妹妹們跑到了溝渠,緊緊擠在了一起。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“但幾分鐘后,龍卷風(fēng)過去了?！笨芍?第二段可描寫龍卷風(fēng)過去了,看著周圍的廢墟,作者感到自己和弟弟妹妹們非常幸運。2.續(xù)寫線索：作者發(fā)現(xiàn)一百碼開外的一條溝渠可以讓他們躲避龍卷風(fēng)——于是,作者召集弟弟妹妹們跑到溝渠那兒——終于他們掙扎著到達(dá)了溝渠——作者用身體護(hù)住了弟弟妹妹——心中祈禱著龍卷風(fēng)趕緊過去——幸運的是,幾分鐘后,龍卷風(fēng)過去了——他們環(huán)顧四周,看到了一片廢墟——作者覺得自己和弟弟妹妹們非常幸運,同時也為自己感到自豪3.詞匯激活行為類①抓?。篻rab/catch②到達(dá)：reach/arriveat③處理：handle/dealwith情緒類①幸運的：lucky/fortunate②對……感到自豪：beproudof/takepridein【點睛】【高分句型1】Whenwereachedtheditch,wehuddledtogether.（運用了when引導(dǎo)的狀語從句）【高分句型2】Aswemadeourwaybacktothedamagedtrailer,Iknewwewereluckytobealive.（運用了as引導(dǎo)的狀語從句和省略that的賓語從句）【調(diào)研02】（24-25高三上·湖南婁底·階段練習(xí)）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Bynature,I’mashyperson.Idon’tliketobefrontandcenter.Iamuncomfortableinunfamiliarsituations,andIdislikebeingthe“newkid”inagroupofpeople.MyretiredhusbandandIhadmovedtoCaliforniatobenearourdaughterandherfamily.Aftereverythingwassettled,Ifeltrestlessandsomewhatlonely.WhenItoldmyelderlyneighborthatIstilldidn’tknowanyone,shesaid,“Nobodyisgoingtocomeknockingonyourdoor.Getoutthereandlookforthem.”O(jiān)neafternoon,InoticedasmalladinourlocalnewspaperaskingforSupportVolunteerstohelpoutatthefiredepartment.MaybeIcoulddosomefilingorotherofficework.Icalledandwastoldtheywerestartingaclasstotrainnewvolunteers.WhenIrealizedthateveryonewasgoingtobenewatthesametime,Ismiled.Iwasinterviewed,andpassed.Iwasnervousonthefirstday.ButassoonasImettheothernewvolunteers,Idiscoveredthisparticulargroupwasmadeupofretiredpeoplewithinterestssimilartomyown.Theywantedtobeactiveandwantedtobeofservicetothecommunity.TheSupportVolunteerscamefrommanydifferentwalksoflife.Together,wemadeupanefficient,knowledgeable,andcapableteam.Whenthetrainingwascompleted,wewereissuedfire-departmentdressuniforms.Eachofuswasondutyfortwenty-fourhours,onedayaweek,withapartner.Whileonduty,wetransferredmailandequipmenttoandfromthecity’ssevenfirestations,andfire/policeheadquarters.Wealsotaughtbusinessesandthepublichowtousefireextinguishers(滅火器),andhandedoutfire-preventioninformationatcommunityevents.Ibecamewellqualifiedformyservice.AlthoughIinitiallyjoinedthevolunteerstomeetpeople,IcontinuedmysatisfyingworkwiththeSupportVolunteersbecauseofsomethingthathappenedafewyearsago.Inthatparticularsummernight,intheplaceIlived,alargewildfirewasburning,causingathreattopeopleinthecity.ThedepartmentwhereIvolunteeredhadbeenaskedtogatherupeveryonetothesheltercenterincasethefirelostcontrol.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。Uponreceivingtheorder,wesprangintoaction.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Wheelingtheelderlymantothecenter,Iknewwehadtoputupthere.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【滿分范文】Uponreceivingtheorder,wesprangintoaction.Dividedintoseveralgroups,weweresenttodifferentneighborhoodsofthecity.JustasIwaslookingintotheneighborhood,anelderlymaninhiswheelchaircaughtmyattention.Fromtheconfusiononhisface,Icouldtellthathedidn’tknowwhatwasactuallyhappening,andwhereeveryoneelsehadgoneto.Hurryinguptohim,Iexplainedwhatwashappeningandwhateveryonewasaskedtodo.Hegladlyallowedmetowheelhimtothesheltercenter.Wheelingtheelderlymantothecenter,Iknewwehadtoputupthere.Beforelong,wevolunteerswentaboutourduties,takingoutthefoodwe’dpreparedandpresentingittoeveryonepresent.Meanwhile,wecookeddelicioussupperforthem.Seeingthecontentedexpressionontheirfaces,IfeltwonderfulthatIcoulddosomethingforeveryone.Thefirecouldbecontrolled,andeverythingwouldreturntonormal.NothingcouldbebetterthanthefeelingthatIwashelpingtomakeadifferenceinthelifeofotherpeople.【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開,講述了性格內(nèi)向的作者隨丈夫搬到加利福尼亞后,感到寂寞煩躁,于是應(yīng)聘成為了一名幫助消防部門的志愿者,希望可以結(jié)交一些朋友。培訓(xùn)結(jié)束后,作者與同伴們相處融洽,順利上崗。一次巨大的野火讓作者真正投入到了志愿工作中去,盡職的工作幫助了很多人,也得到了人們的認(rèn)可,作者也因此一直繼續(xù)著這份志愿者工作?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“一接到命令,我們就立即行動起來?！笨芍?第一段可描寫作者和其他志愿者們具體的行動,以及對一個坐著輪椅的老人的幫助。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我把老人推到中心,我知道我們必須在那里過夜?！笨芍?第二段可描寫作者和其他志愿者們在中心為準(zhǔn)備人們的露宿所做的具體服務(wù),以及作者的感受。2.續(xù)寫線索：立即行動——分組援助——注意到坐輪椅的老人——解釋、安撫——推老人到中心——分發(fā)食物——制作晚餐——感受——點明主題3.詞匯激活：行為類：①發(fā)生：happen/takeplace②允許：allow/permit③被要求做：beaskedtodo/berequestedtodo④展示、呈現(xiàn)：present/display情緒類：①困惑：confusion/puzzlement②滿意的：contented/satisfied【點睛】【高分句型1】Fromtheconfusiononhisface,Icouldtellthathedidn’tknowwhatwasactuallyhappening,andwhereeveryoneelsehadgoneto.(運用了以連接詞that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句和what以及where連接的兩個并列的賓語從句)【高分句型2】Beforelong,wevolunteerswentaboutourduties,takingoutthefoodwe’dpreparedandpresentingittoeveryonepresent.(運用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語和省略關(guān)系代詞引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句)【調(diào)研03】（24-25高二上·遼寧遼陽·期末）閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。WhenHurricaneIanhitFlorida,itwasapowerfulhurricanethatbroughtwithitdisastrousflooding,winds,andarecord-breakingviolentstorm.ManyNaples,FloridaresidentslikeKarenLauderrefusedtoleavetheirhomesbecausetheyunderestimatedtheintensityofthestorm.Karenis84yearsoldandreliesonawheelchairtogetaroundbecausesheismissingaleg.Herson,JohnnyLauder,triedrepeatedlytogethertoleave,butsherefused.Johnnyandhiswholefamilylivedwithinafewblocksofoneanother.Hiswifewasoutoftownduringthestorm,sothedeliverydriverandformerpoliceofficerdecidedtostayathisson’shouse.TheykeptinconstanttouchwithKarenasthestormragedoutside,watchingthewaterrisingdangerouslyallaroundthem.WhenKarenreportedthatthewaterinherhousehadreachedherbellybutton,heknewhehadtotakeaction.First,Johnnyensuredhissonandtheirpetsweretakencareof.Hemadeeveryoneclimbinsidetheattic(閣樓),gavethemsuppliesandwater,andmades